Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 文法の誤り（"This time are" は "This time is" に修正）や冗長な表現を避け、より自然で簡潔な英語を使うことが重要です。また、接続詞を使って文の流れをスムーズにしましょう。

例: I usually eat snacks between lunch and dinner because the gap is too long to go without eating. For example, I often have cookies or bread, which help me feel comfortable and focused while studying.

提案: 意味が伝わりにくい部分（"without taking snaps"）を明確にし、文法や語彙の誤りを修正しましょう。また、理由を具体的に述べ、接続詞を使って論理的に説明することが大切です。

例: Yes, I believe eating snacks can be healthy if chosen wisely. For instance, snacks provide me with necessary nutrients that help me concentrate better during studying and exercising.

提案: 繰り返しや曖昧な表現（"hmm"）を避け、より自然な表現を心がけましょう。また、接続詞を使って理由を明確に述べると良いです。

例: No, I didn't often eat snacks when I was young because I preferred exercising outside. For example, I spent more time playing football or baseball with my friends.

提案: 発音のための間投詞（"uh"）を減らし、文法（"a bread" は不可算名詞なので "bread" に修正）や語彙の誤りを直しましょう。具体的な理由を述べ、接続詞で文をつなげることが重要です。

例: I like to eat bread as a snack because it gives me energy and nutrients. Moreover, there are many kinds of bread, so I can enjoy different types every day.

× This time are too long to not to eat anything, so I have to take some snacks such as cookies, bread.

✓ This time is too long to not eat anything, so I have to take some snacks such as cookies and bread.

The subject 'This time' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. Also, 'not to eat' is incorrect; it should be 'not eat' to express the negative infinitive correctly. Additionally, 'cookies, bread' should be connected with 'and' for proper listing.

× I definitely think it is healthy to eat snacks without taking snaps.

✓ I definitely think it is healthy to eat snacks without taking naps.

The word 'snaps' is a typo or incorrect word here; the correct word is 'naps'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar problem, but it affects the sentence meaning.

× I guess snacks help me take nutritions.

✓ I guess snacks help me get nutrition.

The word 'nutritions' is uncountable and should be singular 'nutrition'. Also, 'take nutrition' is unnatural; 'get nutrition' or 'provide nutrition' is better.

× I used to prefer exercising outside better than eating snacks, so I wanted to spend more time hmm exercising outside, such as playing football or baseball with my friends.

✓ I used to prefer exercising outside rather than eating snacks, so I wanted to spend more time exercising outside, such as playing football or baseball with my friends.

The phrase 'prefer exercising outside better than' is incorrect; 'prefer ... rather than ...' is the correct structure. Also, 'hmm' is filler and should be omitted in formal speech.

× I'd I like to eat a bread as a snack because, uh, a bread, uh, make me get the energy and the new nutrition.

✓ I'd like to eat bread as a snack because bread gives me energy and nutrition.

'Bread' is an uncountable noun and does not take the article 'a'. Also, 'make me get the energy and the new nutrition' is awkward; 'gives me energy and nutrition' is more natural.

× In addition, a bread has a lot of kinds, so I can keep eating, uh, every day.

✓ In addition, bread has many kinds, so I can keep eating it every day.

Again, 'bread' is uncountable and should not have 'a'. 'A lot of kinds' is better expressed as 'many kinds'. Also, 'keep eating' should be followed by an object 'it' to clarify what is being eaten.