Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然，语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I usually eat snacks only occasionally because I want to keep fit. However, when I was a child, I liked eating snacks very much.

提案: 表达不清楚且语法错误严重，逻辑混乱。建议先明确观点，再用具体理由支持，避免重复和模糊表达。

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy. However, eating a small amount can improve mental health, but eating too much is harmful.

提案: 句子结构混乱，语法错误多，表达不流畅。建议使用简单句，清晰表达父母的态度和原因。

例: Yes, I wanted to eat snacks every day when I was a child, but my parents often refused because they thought snacks were unhealthy and had negative effects.

提案: 表达有语法错误，词汇使用不准确。建议用更准确的词汇表达感受，并注意语法和拼写。

例: My favorite snack is sugary food because it helps me relax and reduce stress. However, I know eating too much sugar can damage my teeth.

× Maybe in the few times I will eat some snacks, but in a lot of times I can't.

✓ Maybe a few times I will eat some snacks, but most of the time I can't.

这里的“the few times”和“a lot of times”用法不当，应该用“a few times”表示少数几次，“most of the time”表示大多数时间。

× But when I was a child I like eat snacks very much.

✓ But when I was a child I liked eating snacks very much.

“like”后面接动词时，表示习惯动作应使用动名词形式“eating”，且时态应与过去时间状语“when I was a child”一致，故用过去式“liked”。

× No I think eat snacks is not health but however if we eat a a bit of snack it make me improve our mental health.

✓ No, I think eating snacks is not healthy, but however if we eat a bit of snack it helps improve our mental health.

“eat snacks”应改为动名词“eating snacks”作主语；“not health”应为形容词“not healthy”；“make me improve our mental health”表达不当，应改为“helps improve our mental health”。

× No I think eat snacks is not health but however if we eat a a bit of snack it make me improve our mental health.

✓ No, I think eating snacks is not healthy, but however if we eat a bit of snack it helps improve our mental health.

“a a bit of snack”中“snack”应为不可数名词或复数形式，通常用不可数形式“snack”或复数“snacks”，此处用“a bit of snack”表示少量零食，语法正确。

× But if we eat a lot it's well.

✓ But if we eat a lot, it's not good.

“it's well”用法错误，应表达“这不好”，故改为“it's not good”。

× Yes, when I was a child I wanted to eat snacks every day but my my parents always reject my pleased because they think it's no no health have it negative effects.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I wanted to eat snacks every day but my parents always rejected my pleas because they thought it was not healthy and had negative effects.

时态应保持一致，过去时态“wanted”、“rejected”、“thought”；“reject”应为过去式“rejected”；“pleased”应为名词“pleas”；“no no health”应为“not healthy”；“have it negative effects”应为“had negative effects”。

× My favorite snacks is sugar because it can improve my mental health and make me feel realized and reduce my stress.

✓ My favorite snack is sugar because it can improve my mental health, make me feel relaxed, and reduce my stress.

“snacks”复数与单数主语不符，应为单数“snack”；“realized”用错，应为形容词“relaxed”。

× But I know if I eat too much sugar it's will be decade for my tooth.

✓ But I know if I eat too much sugar it will be bad for my teeth.

“it's will be”重复，应为“it will be”；“decade”用错，应为“bad”；“tooth”应为复数“teeth”。