Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "I use that twice a day" which should be "I usually eat snacks twice a day." Also, avoid redundancy like "a bit hungry, but not too hungry." Try to use more natural expressions and concise sentences.

例: I usually eat snacks twice a day, around 10:30 AM and 5:00 PM. I snack when I feel slightly hungry but not enough for a full meal, so I eat something light to satisfy my hunger.

提案: Your answer shows good intent but contains unclear vocabulary and some mistakes, such as "a pack of nuns" and "a box of yoga," which seem to be errors. Make sure to use correct and relevant vocabulary. Also, improve sentence structure and coherence by using linking words properly.

例: I think eating snacks is healthy for me because I choose nutritious options like a pack of nuts or a box of yogurt. These snacks give me energy and help me stay active until my next meal.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear but has some grammatical errors, such as "unhealthy snack" should be plural "unhealthy snacks," and subject-verb agreement issues. Try to use linking words like "for example" more smoothly and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, but they were mostly unhealthy, such as chips, cake, and pizza. Because of this, I gained weight, so now I prefer healthier snacks.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains awkward phrasing like "It would keep me not only continue my day." Try to use clearer and more natural expressions. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Nowadays, I like to eat healthy snacks such as a pack of nuts or a small box of yogurt when I feel hungry. These snacks help me stay energized and feel satisfied throughout the day.

× I use that twice a day.

✓ I eat snacks twice a day.

The phrase 'I use that' is incorrect because 'use' does not collocate with 'snacks'. The correct verb is 'eat'. Also, 'that' is vague here; specifying 'snacks' clarifies the meaning.

× For example, a pack of nuns or a box of yoga is something that can not only energize me but also can make my day continue so to the next meal time.

✓ For example, a pack of nuts or a box of yogurt is something that can not only energize me but also help me continue my day until the next meal time.

The words 'nuns' and 'yoga' are incorrect; the intended words are 'nuts' and 'yogurt'. Also, the phrase 'make my day continue so to the next meal time' is awkward; 'help me continue my day until the next meal time' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I did often eat snacks when I was young and back then I mostly ate unhealthy snack.

✓ Yes, I did often eat snacks when I was young and back then I mostly ate unhealthy snacks.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to multiple items in general.

× For example chips, cake or a slice of pizza is very unhealthy and made me gain a lot of weight.

✓ For example, chips, cake, or a slice of pizza are very unhealthy and made me gain a lot of weight.

When listing multiple items, the verb should agree in plural form 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, commas are needed after 'For example' and between items for clarity.

× Nowadays, since I tend to eat healthy snacks, I sometimes eat a pack of nuts when I feel hungry or a small box of yogurt.

✓ Nowadays, since I tend to eat healthy snacks, I sometimes eat a pack of nuts when I feel hungry or a small box of yogurt.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not require correction.

× It would keep me not only continue my day but also make me feel satisfied.

✓ It not only helps me continue my day but also makes me feel satisfied.

The phrase 'keep me not only continue my day' is incorrect. The verb 'help' is appropriate here, and subject-verb agreement requires 'helps' and 'makes' to match the singular subject 'it'.