Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和用词不够准确，且句子结构较为混乱。建议简化句子，注意单复数和词汇拼写，避免重复表达。

例: I usually don't eat snacks because they often contain a lot of sugar and unhealthy ingredients. I think it's better to eat fewer snacks to stay healthy.

提案: 回答中有逻辑重复和表达不清的问题。建议使用连词使句子更连贯，避免重复，并且表达更准确。

例: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they usually have a lot of sugar and unhealthy ingredients. Therefore, I prefer to eat fewer snacks and choose healthier options instead.

提案: 句子结构不完整，时态和语法错误较多。建议注意时态一致，简化句子结构，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I loved eating snacks when I was young. I often ate them after school because I didn't know they were unhealthy and contained a lot of sugar that could harm my health.

提案: 表达中存在语法错误和词汇使用不当。建议注意比较级的正确使用，句子结构清晰，并避免重复。

例: I prefer eating nuts because they are healthier than other snacks like chocolate or candy. Nuts contain less sugar, so I choose them more often.

× Honestly I don't usually eat snacks a lot because I think snacks is not healthy for humans because snakes have a lot of sugar or unhealthy thing on it so I think it less snacks is better than eat snacks.

✓ Honestly I don't usually eat snacks a lot because I think snacks are not healthy for humans because snacks have a lot of sugar or unhealthy things in them, so I think less snacks is better than eating snacks.

snacks 是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式 are；snakes 是拼写错误，应为 snacks；unhealthy thing 应为复数 unhealthy things；less snacks 后应接动名词 eating。

× Honestly I don't usually eat snacks a lot because I think snacks is not healthy for humans because snakes have a lot of sugar or unhealthy thing on it so I think it less snacks is better than eat snacks.

✓ Honestly I don't usually eat snacks a lot because I think snacks are not healthy for humans because snacks have a lot of sugar or unhealthy things in them, so I think less snacks is better than eating snacks.

表示“含有”时应使用介词 in 而非 on；因此应说 have ... in them。

× No, I don't think it is healthy for me to eat snacks because most snacks contain a lot of sugar and unhealthy ingredients, which can impact our body and can be better for our health.

✓ No, I don't think it is healthy for me to eat snacks because most snacks contain a lot of sugar and unhealthy ingredients, which can impact our body and are not good for our health.

can be better 用法不当，表达健康影响时应使用 are not good for，表示不利于健康。

× Yes, when I was young, I love eat snacks and I always eat snacks after school because when I was young, I don't know snacks is a unhealthy food in our life and I don't know snacks is contains a lot of sugar that impacts our health.

✓ Yes, when I was young, I loved eating snacks and I always ate snacks after school because when I was young, I didn't know snacks were unhealthy foods in our life and I didn't know snacks contained a lot of sugar that impacts our health.

love 应用过去式 loved；eat 应改为动名词 eating；don't know 应用过去式 didn't know；snacks 是复数，谓语动词应用复数形式 were 和 contained。

× Yes, when I was young, I love eat snacks and I always eat snacks after school because when I was young, I don't know snacks is a unhealthy food in our life and I don't know snacks is contains a lot of sugar that impacts our health.

✓ Yes, when I was young, I loved eating snacks and I always ate snacks after school because when I was young, I didn't know snacks were unhealthy foods in our life and I didn't know snacks contained a lot of sugar that impacts our health.

a unhealthy food 中 unhealthy 前应使用元音音素开头的冠词 an；food 应用复数形式 foods。

× I prefer to eat nuts because I think eat nuts is more healthier to eat another snacks like chocolate or candy because nuts is fewer sugar than other snacks, so I prefer eat nuts.

✓ I prefer to eat nuts because I think eating nuts is healthier than eating other snacks like chocolate or candy because nuts have less sugar than other snacks, so I prefer eating nuts.

eat nuts 应用动名词 eating nuts；more healthier 是重复比较级，应改为 healthier；another snacks 应改为 other snacks；nuts 是复数，谓语动词应用复数 have；fewer sugar 应改为 less sugar；prefer 后应接动名词 eating。