Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi phát âm và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: 'snake' thay vì 'snack'). Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và dễ hiểu hơn.

例: I don't usually eat snacks, but when I meet distant relatives or friends, I often have some snacks with them. It helps to make the conversation more enjoyable for everyone.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và phát âm từ vựng chính xác, đồng thời nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ, dùng 'because' để giải thích và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết.

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they contain many preservatives and are heavily seasoned with salt, which is bad for our health.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và phát âm từ vựng chính xác. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và câu bổ sung có liên kết logic.

例: Definitely yes. When I was a child, I often ate snacks because I thought their flavors were delicious. However, as I grew up, I learned that snacks are not good for our health.

提案: Bạn cần sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và ngữ pháp đúng, tránh lặp từ và nói lắp. Hãy trình bày ý kiến rõ ràng và có liên kết bằng cách sử dụng các từ nối phù hợp.

例: I like potato chips because they are made from potatoes and come from a famous brand. I think their quality is much better than other unbranded snacks, so I prefer to choose branded snacks.

× Oh, no, I don't usually snake, but when I meet distant relatives or my friends, I often snake with them.

✓ Oh, no, I don't usually snack, but when I meet distant relatives or my friends, I often snack with them.

The word 'snake' is a misspelling of the verb 'snack'. The verb 'snack' is the correct form to describe eating small amounts of food between meals.

× Just bring, uh, as conversation is kind of that.

✓ Just bring it up, uh, as conversation is kind of like that.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'it up' clarifies the meaning, and 'kind of like that' is a more natural expression.

× I think they enjoy it, then I enjoy with them, yeah.

✓ I think they enjoy it, then I enjoy it with them, yeah.

The verb 'enjoy' requires a direct object without a preposition, so 'enjoy it with them' is correct instead of 'enjoy with them'.

× Absolutely no I don't think it's healthy for me to eat snake because it contains so many preservative.

✓ Absolutely no, I don't think it's healthy for me to eat snacks because they contain so many preservatives.

'Snake' should be 'snacks' (plural noun). 'Preservative' should be plural 'preservatives' because it refers to multiple substances.

× The snake also are heavily seasoned.

✓ The snacks are also heavily seasoned.

'Snake' should be plural 'snacks' to match the plural verb 'are'.

× It has many salt with not good for our health so I think people don't.

✓ They have a lot of salt which is not good for our health, so I think people shouldn't eat them.

'Many salt' is incorrect; 'salt' is an uncountable noun and should be quantified with 'a lot of'. The sentence also needs restructuring for clarity.

× When I want a children I was often a snake and I was really enjoy it because I just think that it's flavors were so delicious and I enjoy it.

✓ When I was a child, I often snacked and really enjoyed it because I thought that its flavors were so delicious and I enjoyed it.

'Want a children' is incorrect; it should be 'was a child'. 'Was often a snake' should be 'often snacked'. Verb tenses should be consistent in past tense.

× But when I grow up I have more knowledge and I know that snake is not good for our health.

✓ But when I grew up, I had more knowledge and I knew that snacks are not good for our health.

The sentence refers to past events, so past tense verbs 'grew', 'had', and 'knew' should be used. 'Snake' should be plural 'snacks'.

× Umm I like lace snake because umm it's what makes up by potato and it's was umm famous brand.

✓ Umm I like Lay's snacks because they are made from potatoes and it's a famous brand.

'Lace snake' is a misspelling of 'Lay's snacks'. 'What makes up by potato' is incorrect; correct form is 'made from potatoes'. 'It's was' is incorrect; should be 'it's' or 'it is'.

× Then I think it's it's equality is better much more than no brand others snakes.

✓ Then I think its quality is much better than other no-brand snacks.

'Equality' should be 'quality'. 'Better much more than' is incorrect; correct order is 'much better than'. 'No brand others snakes' should be 'other no-brand snacks'.

× So I think we should choose brand snake to eat.

✓ So I think we should choose branded snacks to eat.

'Brand snake' is incorrect; it should be 'branded snacks' to refer to snacks from a brand.