Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi phát âm và ngữ pháp, ví dụ như "snake" thay vì "snack" và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và dùng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

例: I usually eat snacks when I watch movies because it helps me relax after a tiring day of studying.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý phát âm từ "snack" và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác như "sugar" thay vì "sword". Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "It's also has".

例: Definitely not. I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they often contain many preservatives, sugar, and spices that are bad for our health.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn rất khó hiểu do lỗi phát âm và ngữ pháp nghiêm trọng. Bạn nên luyện tập phát âm từ vựng cơ bản và xây dựng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng để truyền đạt ý tưởng hiệu quả.

例: Yes, I used to eat snacks almost every day when I was young because I enjoyed them. However, now I avoid them because I know they are not good for my health.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện phát âm và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác như "snack" thay vì "snake". Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và nên nêu rõ tên các loại snack bạn thích.

例: I don't have specific favorite snacks, but I usually choose popular brands like Oishi or Lays because I trust their quality.

× I usually eat snake when I watch movie because it's helped me relax and I feel was so interesting to have snakes and movie perfectly for relaxing from a tired weekday of studying. Yeah.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I watch movies because they help me relax and I feel it is so interesting to have snacks and movies perfectly for relaxing after a tiring weekday of studying. Yeah.

The word 'snake' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to multiple items. Similarly, 'movie' should be plural 'movies' to match the context. Also, 'it's helped' should be 'they help' to agree with plural subject and present tense. 'I feel was so interesting' is incorrect; it should be 'I feel it is so interesting' to maintain proper sentence structure and tense.

× I usually eat snake when I watch movie because it's helped me relax and I feel was so interesting to have snakes and movie perfectly for relaxing from a tired weekday of studying. Yeah.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I watch movies because they help me relax and I feel it is so interesting to have snacks and movies perfectly for relaxing after a tiring weekday of studying. Yeah.

The modal verb 'helped' is incorrectly used here; the correct form is 'help' to express habitual action in present tense.

× Definitely no. I don't think it's healthy for me to eat snake because snake contains so many preservatives. It's also has so many sword and spice, which is not good for our health.

✓ Definitely no. I don't think it's healthy for me to eat snacks because snacks contain so many preservatives. They also have so much salt and spice, which is not good for our health.

'Snake' should be plural 'snacks' to refer to multiple items. 'Contains' should be 'contain' to agree with plural subject. 'It's also has' is incorrect; it should be 'They also have' to match plural subject and correct verb form. 'Sword' is a typo and should be 'salt'. 'So many' is used for countable nouns; 'so much' is correct for uncountable nouns like salt and spice.

× Of course guests running was a choice are usually a snake, a snake almost every day because I just think that is where the leases and I enjoy it. But now when I have more knowledge, I don't usually use it anymore because it's not good for our health.

✓ Of course, eating snacks was usually my choice, almost every day, because I just think that they are delicious and I enjoy them. But now, when I have more knowledge, I don't usually eat them anymore because they're not good for our health.

The original sentence has many errors. 'Guests running was a choice are usually a snake' is unclear and incorrect. It should be 'eating snacks was usually my choice'. 'A snake' should be plural 'snacks'. 'Where the leases' is likely a mishearing of 'delicious'. Pronouns should agree in number: 'they are delicious' and 'I enjoy them'. 'Use it' should be 'eat them' to refer to snacks.

× I don't have any specific names, but I can't say to you that Oishi's or lace and something kind of that. I just eat snake with famous brand and I think people should eat that too because like some no brand snake maybe.

✓ I don't have any specific names, but I can tell you that Oishi's or Lays and something like that. I just eat snacks from famous brands and I think people should eat those too because some no-brand snacks may be worse.

'Can't say to you that' should be 'can tell you that' for correct expression. 'Lace' is likely 'Lays', a brand name. 'Snake' should be 'snacks'. 'With famous brand' should be 'from famous brands'. 'Eat that' should be 'eat those' to agree with plural 'snacks'. 'Like some no brand snake maybe' is unclear; corrected to 'some no-brand snacks may be worse' for clarity.