Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 注意句子時態和語法，簡潔回應並提供具體時間和頻率。避免重複（如"in the afternoon"和"at afternoon"），並用連接詞使語流更順。可以開頭直接回答問題，然後用一兩個支持細節說明原因和頻率。

例: I usually eat snacks in the late afternoon or early evening. I often have something small between lunch and dinner when I feel a little hungry, and sometimes I just have a chocolate or a piece of fruit.

提案: 回答要有主題句並清晰表達立場，使用連接詞（because, however）來組織理由；提供更具體的例子或替代選擇以增加內容豐富度。注意語法（e.g. 'too much of them' 改為 'too many of them' 或 'too much of these snacks'）。

例: I don't think most snacks are very healthy because many, like candies and chocolate bars, contain a lot of sugar and fat. However, having a small portion occasionally or choosing healthier options, such as nuts or yogurt, can be acceptable.

提案: 使用正確的時態（過去式）和更清晰的句子結構。先給出直接回答，再用一兩個具體細節說明頻率和父母的態度。避免重複和語填詞（uh）。

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child, such as candies, biscuits and chocolate. My parents sometimes stopped me from eating too many, but they usually allowed me to have one or two small treats each day.

提案: 開頭應直接回答最喜歡的零食，句子要簡潔且語法正確。說明原因時提供具體比較（例如含糖量、脂肪含量）並用連接詞使語意連貫。避免不確定詞（"sometimes you can see"）而應直接陳述事實或經驗。

例: My favourite snack is a chocolate bun, especially one made with dark chocolate. I prefer dark chocolate because it usually has less sugar and fat compared with milk chocolate, so it feels slightly healthier.

× I usually eating snacks and at afternoon, in the afternoon or either in the evening.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the afternoon or in the evening.

句中使用了動詞-ing 形式“eating”，但在表示習慣性動作時應使用一般現在時的動詞原形或第三人稱加 -s（此處主語為 I），正確應為 “eat”。另外，“at afternoon” 不正確，應用介詞 “in” 和時間段 “the afternoon”。建議：描述習慣時用一般現在時，例如 “I usually eat…”；時間段用介詞 in + the + afternoon/evening。

× Especially when I feel a little bit hungry between the meal time so and sometimes I just eat a chocolate.

✓ Especially when I feel a little bit hungry between mealtimes, sometimes I just eat a chocolate.

原句結構混亂，“between the meal time so” 是錯誤用法。應使用複數名詞 “mealtimes” 或短語 “between meals” 表示用餐間隔；連接詞“so”在此多餘，且句子最好拆成兩部分或用逗號連接。建議：使用簡潔結構如 “when I feel ... , I sometimes ...”。

× Well, not really some snacks like you know the candies, chocolate bar or some cookies, they are not that taste good but not very healthy because they contain high sugar or high fat.

✓ Well, not really. Some snacks, like candies, chocolate bars or cookies, don't taste that good and are not very healthy because they contain high sugar or high fat.

原句中量詞和名詞單複數不一致（“chocolate bar” 應與其他並列項目保持複數形式），且使用了不正確的短語順序“not that taste good”。應改為主語+謂語結構，“don't taste that good” 或 “aren't that tasty”。建議：並列名詞保持一致數，使用否定助動詞 dont/aren't 表示否定。

× Eating too much them is not very healthy but eating some of them.

✓ Eating too many of them is not very healthy, but eating some of them is fine.

“too much them” 用法錯誤。可數名詞複數（snacks）應用 “too many of them”；另外後半句缺少謂語，應補上“is fine”或“is okay”。建議：區分可數/不可數，用 too many (可數) / too much (不可數)，並保證句子有完整謂語。

× Yes, I use a lot of uh snacks when I was a a kid, such as candies, biscuits, and chocolate.

✓ Yes, I used a lot of snacks when I was a kid, such as candies, biscuits, and chocolate.

描述過去習慣時應使用一般過去時，動詞 “use” 應改為過去式 “used”。建議：談論過去經歷或習慣時使用過去式（used, played, went 等）。

× My parents sometimes stopped me to eating too much from eating too much, but I'm still allowed uh to have a few in a day.

✓ My parents sometimes stopped me from eating too much, but I was still allowed to have a few a day.

“stopped me to eating” 用法錯誤，應為 “stopped me from doing sth.”；重複短語 “from eating too much” 應刪除。第二部分時態需與描述過去保持一致，應使用過去時 “was allowed”。建議：記住固定搭配 “stop someone from doing sth” 並保持時態一致。

× Often now I the most my favorite snacks is chocolate bun, especially dark chocolate.

✓ Nowadays, my favorite snack is a chocolate bun, especially one with dark chocolate.

原句詞序混亂且冗餘 “the most my favorite”。應使用 “Nowadays” 或 “Now” 引出現在情況；主語與謂語需一致 “my favorite snack is ...”。若指一種食品用單數或不可數形式，“a chocolate bun” 或 “chocolate buns”。建議：簡化表達，按 主語 + 謂語 + 補語 的順序。

× They're sometime you can see the are more healthier A healthier than other kind of chocolate because they contain less sugar and and the fat.

✓ You can sometimes see that they are healthier than other kinds of chocolate because they contain less sugar and fat.

原句中代詞和結構混亂，“They're sometime you can see the are more healthier” 不合語法。應改為 “You can sometimes see that they are healthier” 表示觀察結果。此外 “more healthier” 為冗餘比較級，應僅用 “healthier”。“other kind” 應為複數 “other kinds”。“and and the fat” 多餘冠詞且重複。建議：比較級只用 one-word comparative（healthier），代詞用法要清晰，避免重複單詞和多餘冠詞。