Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms.

例: I usually eat snacks while watching Netflix or scrolling social media. For example, I often have popcorn during a movie and nuts when I’m browsing my phone, because they are convenient and easy to eat.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and use linking words. Avoid vague phrases and repetition, and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles).

例: I don’t think most snacks are healthy because they are often high in sugar and fat. However, occasionally eating healthier snacks like fruit or salads can be fine, so moderation is key.

提案: Answer directly with past tense and add a specific reason and one example. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition and fragmented sentences.

例: Yes, I ate snacks every day when I was a child because I didn’t understand nutrition. For instance, I used to have candy and chips after school almost every day.

提案: List your favorite snacks clearly and include one brief reason or context. Use correct item names (e.g., "fries" and avoid unclear words like "leaves") and keep the answer natural and concise.

例: I like biscuits, chips and French fries, especially when I’m watching Netflix or scrolling my phone. For example, I usually eat salted biscuits while watching shows because they’re easy to share.

× I usually eat snacks when I am using Netflix or even use social media or sometimes watch a film or TV dramas or show.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I am watching Netflix, using social media, or sometimes watching a film, TV dramas, or a show.

The sentence mixes verb forms (am using, use, watch) causing inconsistency. Use parallel present continuous forms for ongoing activities: 'am watching' and 'using'. Also add articles and commas for clarity. Maintain consistent verb form for items in a list.

× These times when I usually eat snacks.

✓ These are the times when I usually eat snacks.

The original is a sentence fragment missing a main verb. Adding the verb 'are' completes the sentence: 'These are the times when I usually eat snacks.' This fixes sentence structure and makes the meaning clear.

× Not too much, but stuff trending now it's a fashion.

✓ Not too much, but trending stuff is a fashion now.

The original has an awkward clause 'stuff trending now it's a fashion' with redundant pronoun 'it' and incorrect word order. Reordering to 'trending stuff is a fashion now' creates a complete sentence with proper subject and verb.

× So I think it's not healthy to eat snacks.

✓ So I think it is not healthy to eat many snacks.

The sentence is mostly correct but unclear about quantity. Adding 'many' clarifies that excessive snacking is unhealthy, matching the intended meaning. No tense change needed.

× It's healthy to eat healthy things like like salad or these types of things that we eat in our, our free time.

✓ It's healthy to eat healthy foods like salad or similar items that we have in our free time.

Repeated 'like like' is redundant and 'things' is vague. Use 'foods' and 'similar items' for clearer nouns. Also remove duplicated words and fix word choice.

× But uh, I think eating snacks are also good for some time.

✓ But I think eating snacks is also okay for some time.

'Eating snacks' is a gerund phrase treated as a singular subject, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. Also 'okay' fits better than 'good' for moderation. Remove filler 'uh'.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young.

The time reference 'when I was young' requires past tense. 'Often' can remain but the verb must be past: 'ate' not 'eat'.

× I think I eat snacks daily at that time because in childhood it's not.

✓ I think I ate snacks daily at that time because in childhood we did not know the benefits of healthy foods.

Multiple problems: tense mismatch ('eat' should be past 'ate'), and the clause 'because in childhood it's not' is unclear and ungrammatical. Replace with 'we did not know the benefits of healthy foods' to provide a clear past-tense reason.

× So I so I eat snacks daily.

✓ So I ate snacks daily.

Redundant words 'So I so I' should be removed and verb should be past tense 'ate' to match the time frame 'daily' in the past. This fixes repetition and tense.

× I like to eat biscuits, fries, leaves, chips.

✓ I like to eat biscuits, fries, chips, and other snacks.

'Leaves' is likely incorrect in this context; perhaps the student meant 'lollipops' or 'cookies' but 'leaves' is not a snack. Removing 'leaves' and adding 'other snacks' makes the list natural. Ensure accurate vocabulary in real responses.

× These types of snacks I usually eat when scrolling my phone and using Netflix.

✓ I usually eat these types of snacks when I am scrolling on my phone or watching Netflix.

Maintain consistent verb forms and prepositions: use 'am scrolling' and 'watching', and 'scrolling on my phone' is the correct prepositional phrase. Use 'or' for alternatives and keep present continuous for ongoing actions.