Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然、语法准确并且更简洁。注意动词形式（e.g. “relaxed” 应为 “relax” 或 “relieve”），避免冗长，给出一个明确的主题句并用一两句补充细节。可以使用连接词如 “so” 来说明因果。

例: I usually eat a small snack before bed. I often choose sweet treats like chocolate because they help me relax, so I can fall asleep more easily.

提案: 注意名词和动词的一致性与可数形式（e.g. “snacks are”, “high in fat or sugar”）。避免数字或打字错误（如 “1”）。表达要有逻辑连接词（because, so, but），并说明具体改变或选择的原因。

例: I don’t think most snacks are healthy because they are often high in fat or sugar. However, since I like snacking to relax, I try to choose healthier options like fruit or whole-grain naan.

提案: 回答总体可以，但要修正冗余与语法（去掉多余的代词 “they”）。可以用过去时更自然地描述习惯，并补充一两个具体细节或感觉来丰富内容。

例: Yes, I often ate sweet snacks as a child. My grandparents used to give me chocolate or candy as a reward after I finished my homework, so I developed a strong sweet tooth.

提案: 注意时态一致（childhood 用过去时）和词组搭配（“high in sugar” 而不是 “high of sugar”）。避免口头填充词（如 “uh”）。控制句子数量在最多五句内，并用连接词对比过去与现在（e.g. “whereas”）。

例: I enjoy sweet snacks such as chocolate and fruit. As a child I preferred chocolate, which made me happy despite being high in sugar, whereas now I tend to choose healthier options like fresh fruit.

× I prefer sweet things like chocolate because they can relaxed me and help me fall asleep.

✓ I prefer sweet things like chocolate because they can relax me and help me fall asleep.

原句中使用了過去式/過去分詞形式“relaxed”，但在此處應與助動詞“can”連用，助動詞後面要接動詞原形。建議將“relaxed”改為動詞原形“relax”。（語法類型：動詞 + -ing 或動詞形式錯誤，屬於清單中第8類）

× I think snacks is not healthy food because they're always high or fat or sugar but I like to snack because they can relaxed me so I try to choose healthy 1 like naan or fruit to eat.

✓ I think snacks are not healthy foods because they're always high in fat or sugar, but I like to snack because they can relax me, so I try to choose healthy ones like naan or fruit to eat.

多處錯誤： 1) 主語“snacks”為複數，應用複數動詞“are”（屬於主謂一致，但根據列表第1和第27類，此處更集中於動詞形式與主語一致，歸為動詞現在分詞/形式錯誤第10類） 2) 表示“含有……”應用短語“high in fat or sugar”，原句用法不正確（介詞使用錯誤，參見第11類）。 3) “relaxed”同樣應為原形“relax”與情態動詞“can”連用（見第8或第10類）。 4) “healthy 1”顯然為打字錯誤，應為“healthy ones”。 5) “food”用複數“foods”或改用不可數“food”且調整句子，這裡用“foods”更合上下文。 建議按更正句子學習：注意主語複數時動詞形式也應為複數；情態動詞後接原形；“high in …”表達含量；使用“ones”指代可數複數名詞。

× Yes, I usually ate sweet snacks when I was a child. I think the reason why I like sweet things is because my grandparents they always brought me chocolate or sugar after I finished my schoolwork.

✓ Yes, I often ate sweet snacks when I was a child. I think the reason I liked sweet things is that my grandparents always brought me chocolate or sweets after I finished my schoolwork.

錯誤點： 1) 句中時態不一致：談及過去習慣時應在從句中也用過去時，如“I liked”而不是“I like”。（屬於第5類過去時問題） 2) “they”為多餘的主語重複，應刪除以避免句子冗餘（代詞使用錯誤，參見第12類）。 3) “sugar”作零食不合適，應用可數名詞“sweets”或“candies”。 建議：講述過去經驗時全文用過去時，避免同一主語重複出現。

× I like sweet things like sugar, chocolate and fruit. When I was a child, I prefer chocolate. Uh, even though they're high of sugar, I like them because they can make me happy. But when I grow up I prefer healthier food like fruit.

✓ I like sweet things like sugar, chocolate and fruit. When I was a child, I preferred chocolate. Even though they're high in sugar, I like them because they can make me happy. But when I grew up I preferred healthier foods like fruit. (如果指現在長大後的情況，最後一句可改為: "But when I grew up I preferred healthier foods like fruit, and now I still choose fruit.")

多處時態和介詞問題： 1) 談到過去的偏好應使用過去時“preferred”而不是現在時“prefer”（第6類/第5類時態錯誤）。 2) “high of sugar”介詞錯誤，正確說法為“high in sugar”（第11類）。 3) 最後一句時態要與時間參照一致：如果說“when I grow up”應為過去式“when I grew up”或改寫為“when I grew up I preferred...”。 建議：注意時間標記詞（when I was a child/when I grew up）決定動詞時態；使用固定搭配“high in ...”。

× I think snacks is not healthy food because they're always high or fat or sugar but I like to snack because they can relaxed me so I try to choose healthy 1 like naan or fruit to eat.

✓ I think snacks are not healthy foods because they're always high in fat or sugar, but I like to snack because they can relax me, so I try to choose healthy ones like naan or fruit to eat.

原句中“snacks”是複數，卻使用單數謂語“is”，造成主謂不一致（屬於單數與複數問題，第1類）。另外“healthy 1”應為“healthy ones”。建議：辨別主語單複數，動詞與之保持一致；用“ones”代替前文提到的可數複數名詞。

× Uh, even though they're high of sugar, I like them because they can make me happy.

✓ Even though they're high in sugar, I like them because they can make me happy.

表達“含糖量高”應使用固定搭配“high in sugar”，而不是“high of sugar”。（屬於第11類介詞使用錯誤）建議記住常用搭配：high in, rich in。