Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence. Avoid filler words and minor grammar slips (e.g. "before dinner", not "before the dinner"). Add a brief linking phrase to explain why you choose that time.

例: I usually eat snacks in the middle of the day, typically between lunch and dinner, because I often get hungry a few hours after lunch.

提案: Fix the double negative and unclear wording. Give a direct opinion first, then a specific reason and include a linking word (e.g. "however" or "but"). Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: I don't think snacking between meals is healthy because it can lead to overeating. However, I sometimes snack for a quick sweet treat, especially after a stressful day.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence and then give specific examples with correct grammar (countable/plural forms). Use a linking word to connect your past habit to a brief reason or consequence.

例: Yes, I often snacked a lot when I was young. For example, I frequently ate chips and ice cream, which were unhealthy and made me feel sluggish afterward.

提案: Use a clear opening sentence about current preference, avoid awkward phrasing ("as far as I grew up" is incorrect). Provide one or two specific examples and explain briefly why, using linking words like "because" or "so".

例: Nowadays I prefer healthier snacks, such as fresh fruit or a small piece of dark chocolate, because they satisfy my hunger and give me a quick energy boost.

× Oh I prefer eating snacks in the middle of the day.

✓ Oh, I prefer eating snacks in the middle of the day.

Missing comma after interjection 'Oh' is punctuation, but tense is correct. However to follow instruction 6 (Present tense issue) we note present simple 'prefer' correctly expresses general habit. Suggestion: keep present simple for habitual actions and add comma after 'Oh' for natural flow.

× Usually it's after lunch and before the dinner because in this time I feel hungry.

✓ Usually it's after lunch and before dinner because at that time I feel hungry.

Incorrect use of the definite article 'the' before unmodified meals (before dinner) and wrong preposition 'in this time'. Use no article with meals when speaking generally (before dinner) and use 'at that time' for specific time reference. Also 'that' is clearer than 'this' in past/pointing context.

× I don't believe that having snacks between the meals is not a good habit.

✓ I don't believe that having snacks between meals is a good habit.

This sentence contains a double negative ('don't believe' and 'not a good habit') creating a meaning reversal. Remove 'not' to convey the intended negative opinion. Also remove 'the' before 'meals' when speaking generally.

× However, for me it is a way to it's something sweet.

✓ However, for me it is a way to have something sweet.

The original mixes two structures ('a way to' and 'it's something'), causing ungrammatical phrasing. Use 'a way to have something sweet' to express purpose. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× It was unhealthy ones like chips and ice creams.

✓ They were unhealthy ones, like chips and ice cream.

Mismatch between subject reference and verb form: refer to 'they' (snacks) so use 'they were'. Also 'ice cream' is uncountable generally, not 'ice creams'. Add comma before example phrase for clarity.

× As far as I grew up, nowadays I prefer healthier snacks like fruits or some dark chocolate bars.

✓ As I grew up, nowadays I prefer healthier snacks like fruit or some dark chocolate bars.

Incorrect phrase 'As far as I grew up' should be 'As I grew up' to indicate change over time. 'Fruits' as a general food category is usually 'fruit'. 'Nowadays' with 'as I grew up' is slightly redundant but acceptable; keep tense consistent.

× It helps me to not be hungry but gives me boost of energy.

✓ It helps me not to be hungry but gives me a boost of energy.

Word order: 'helps me not to be hungry' is preferred over 'to not be'. Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'boost of energy'. Also 'gives me a boost of energy' is idiomatic.