Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and incorrect tense or article use. For example, say when you snack, why, and what type you choose. Keep it under five sentences.

例: I usually eat snacks at weekends. Because I’m trying to lose weight during the week, I save treats for Saturday or Sunday. If I do snack on weekdays, I choose low-calorie options like fruit or yogurt.

提案: Answer directly and explain your opinion with a clear reason and an example. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'harmful to health' not 'damage to the human health') and complete the thought — say what you prefer instead. Use a linking word to connect opinion and reason.

例: No, I don't think most snacks are healthy because many are high in sugar and fat. For that reason, I prefer healthier alternatives such as nuts or fruit when I want something between meals.

提案: Give a clear past-tense response with a topic sentence, then add specific details. Use correct past-tense forms and avoid fragmented sentences. Explain frequency and a reason or example to support your answer.

例: When I was young, I rarely ate snacks because small local stores mostly sold basic meals rather than packaged snacks. For example, there were no snack aisles in the shops near my home, so I usually ate home-cooked food between meals.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence listing your favorite snacks, then give a brief, specific reason or compare choices. Use correct verb patterns (enjoy + -ing) and avoid repetition. One or two supporting details are enough.

例: I enjoy eating dried fruit, nuts and dark chocolate because they are nutritious and satisfying. For instance, dried apricots give me natural sweetness, while almonds provide protein and dark chocolate is a healthier treat in moderation.

× I usually eat snacks in weekend because umm, now I do lose my weight, that's why umm, I eat diet food then uh, if I want to eat snack I usually eat.

✓ I usually eat snacks on the weekend because I'm trying to lose weight now; that's why I eat diet food. If I want a snack, I usually eat one.

Use 'on the weekend' or 'at the weekend' instead of 'in weekend' (preposition + article). Use present continuous 'I'm trying' for an ongoing action rather than 'now I do lose my weight'. Omit unnecessary filler words. Use 'a snack' when referring to a single item and repeat full clauses or use punctuation to separate ideas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:17.

× I don't think so. Uh, the old snacks are damage to the human health. That's why, uh, if I want to eat snack, I usually, uh, prefer.

✓ I don't think so. Old snacks are damaging to human health. That's why if I want to eat a snack, I usually avoid them or choose healthier options.

Use the adjective/verb form correctly: 'damaging' (present participle) describes impact; 'damage' is a noun or verb and 'are damage' is incorrect. Use 'human health' without 'the'. Use 'a snack' for singular. Provide a complete verb after 'prefer' (prefer what?) or replace with 'avoid them' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:13.

× When I was a young, I had eat snake barely because that time, uh, shopping center usually sold the, uh, the main food. For example. They haven't they hadn't any.

✓ When I was young, I rarely ate snacks because at that time shopping centers usually sold main foods, for example; they didn't have any snacks.

Do not use 'a' before 'young' when referring to age period — say 'when I was young'. Use past simple 'ate' rather than 'had eat'. Use 'rarely' for 'barely'. Use 'at that time' for past reference. 'Shopping centers' plural and 'main foods' or 'staple foods' is better. Use past simple 'didn't have' rather than 'haven't/they hadn't any'. Grammar problem type ID:22.

× I enjoy to eat chocolate, dried fruit and nuts because those are umm, healthy. Then the others and also uh, I eat uh, dark chocolate.

✓ I enjoy eating chocolate, dried fruit, and nuts because they are healthy. I also eat dark chocolate.

Use 'enjoy' + gerund (verb + -ing): 'enjoy eating', not 'enjoy to eat'. Use 'they' to refer back to the list and 'also' before the verb for smoother flow. Remove filler words and redundant phrases. Grammar problem type ID:8