Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and sentence fragments. Use linking words like 'so' or 'because' to show reason.

例: I usually have a snack in the evening with my tea because it helps me relax after work. For example, I often eat a small sandwich or fruit while I unwind and prepare dinner.

提案: Answer directly then explain with clear reasons. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, word choice) and avoid vague phrases like 'lost tiredness.' Use linking words (because, so) and be specific about types or portion control when discussing health.

例: Yes, I think light evening snacks can be healthy because they prevent me from overeating at dinner. For instance, I choose yogurt or a handful of nuts so I stay satisfied without adding too many calories.

提案: Give a clear past-tense statement and specific reasons or examples. Use correct tense and simpler phrasing. Avoid asking rhetorical questions that confuse the response. Mention frequencies or typical snacks to add detail.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. I preferred them to homemade food because they were spicy and tasty, and I used most of my pocket money to buy items like chips and samosas after school.

提案: Start with a direct statement listing favorite snacks, then add one specific reason or detail. Avoid repetition and clarify contradictory details (mentioning country). Use linking words such as 'and' or 'because'.

例: I mainly like Indian snacks such as samosas and also enjoy Chinese-style noodles. I like samosas for their spicy filling and noodles because they are quick and inexpensive here.

× I do usually eat snacks at the evening time with my tea which helps me relax after I come from the work.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the evening with my tea, which helps me relax after I come home from work.

Adverb placement: 'usually' is more natural before the main verb 'eat' rather than 'do usually eat'. Article and preposition: use 'in the evening' not 'at the evening time'. 'Come home from work' is the correct phrase, not 'come from the work'. Combine clauses with a comma before 'which' to clarify that the tea helps you relax.

× That time I ate snacks because I feel tired at that time and come from the.

✓ At that time I ate snacks because I felt tired after coming home.

Tense consistency: the clause describes past actions, so use past tense 'felt' and 'came' (or the gerund 'coming') rather than present 'feel'. Sentence completion: 'come from the' is incomplete; use 'coming home' or 'coming from work'. Simplify to 'after coming home.'

× Yes, I think it is healthy for me to eat snacks at the evening time, because at the evening time I feel lost tiredness, which makes me feel healthy when I eat snack with my tea and I feels not so hungry to take the dinner as early as possible.

✓ Yes, I think it is healthy for me to eat snacks in the evening, because at that time I feel less tired, which makes me feel better when I eat a snack with my tea, and I do not feel so hungry so I can have dinner later.

Preposition and article: use 'in the evening' and 'a snack' for singular countable noun. Word choice: 'less tired' not 'lost tiredness'. Subject-verb agreement: 'I feels' should be 'I do not feel'. Clarity and word order: 'so I can have dinner later' is clearer than 'to take the dinner as early as possible.' Use consistent present simple for general statements or present/past as appropriate.

× How do I also need snacks so many when I was young?

✓ Why did I need so many snacks when I was young?

Sentence structure: the original is ungrammatical. Use 'why did I need' to form a past question. Quantifier placement: 'so many snacks' is correct; place it after the verb. Use past tense 'did...need' for actions in childhood.

× At the young age, I usually prefer to eat snacks only as compared to homemade food because snacks are so much spicy and I I spend all my pocket money on the snacks.

✓ When I was young, I usually preferred to eat snacks rather than homemade food because the snacks were very spicy, and I spent all my pocket money on them.

Tense: describe past habits with past simple 'preferred' and 'were'. Phrase and word choice: 'When I was young' is natural, 'rather than' is better than 'as compared to'. 'So much spicy' is incorrect; use 'very spicy'. Pronoun use: avoid repeating 'I'. Replace 'on the snacks' with 'on them' to avoid repetition.

× I do like to eat too, mostly the Indian snack like samosa and the Chinese snack that is noodles which I like the most which I like most and they are cheaper in my country nowadays.

✓ I also like to eat snacks, mostly Indian snacks like samosas and Chinese snacks like noodles, which I like the most; they are cheaper in my country nowadays.

Adverb placement: 'I also like' is more natural than 'I do like to eat too'. Plural and article use: 'samosas' and 'noodles' are plural. Remove redundancy 'which I like the most' repeated. Punctuation: use commas to separate items and a semicolon or comma before the final clause. Maintain present simple for general preferences.

× I live in Canada.

✓ I live in Canada.

This sentence is grammatical and appropriate as a simple present statement of current residence. No correction needed.