Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了耐心的概念，但语法和用词不够准确，句子结构较为混乱，建议加强语法练习，使用更自然的表达方式，并避免重复。

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can concentrate on tasks for a long time without getting distracted. This patience helps me complete important work efficiently.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，建议使用更准确的句型和词汇，表达原因时使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I feel impatient when I have to wait a long time at traffic lights, especially because I have important tasks to finish. Waiting feels like a waste of time in such situations.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并补充完整句子。

例: I don't mind doing something for a long time because I am a patient person. This quality helps me stay calm even when tasks take a long time.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和句子未完成，建议注意动词形式和句子完整性，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Definitely. I work as a material planner, and this job requires a lot of patience because I need to carefully analyze many numbers to ensure materials are available on time.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多且句子未完成，建议使用正确的时态和句型，表达情感变化时要清晰完整。

例: I think I am more patient now than when I was a child. As a child, I couldn't control my emotions well, especially when I had a lot of homework and little time to play. Now, I can manage my feelings better.

× I consider that I'm a patient person because I can still focus on something for a long time without distract with other things.

✓ I consider that I'm a patient person because I can still focus on something for a long time without being distracted by other things.

此处“without distract with other things”中，动词“distract”应使用动名词形式“being distracted”，并且介词应为“by”，表示“不会被其他事情分心”。

× This patient allows me to complete some more important tasks as we work and get work doing efficiency.

✓ This patience allows me to complete some more important tasks as we work and get work done efficiently.

“This patient”应为“this patience”，表示“耐心”；“get work doing efficiency”表达不正确，应改为“get work done efficiently”，表示“高效完成工作”。

× When we wait a long, traffic lights can cause me feel impatient, especially since I have more important tasks we need to do.

✓ When we wait for a long time, traffic lights can cause me to feel impatient, especially since I have more important tasks we need to do.

“wait”后应加介词“for”表示等待一段时间；“cause me feel”应为“cause me to feel”，动词“cause”后需加不定式。

× Facing this with with let me feel waste time.

✓ Facing this makes me feel like I'm wasting time.

原句结构混乱，“Facing this with with let me feel waste time”不符合英语表达，应改为“Facing this makes me feel like I'm wasting time”，表达“面对这种情况让我觉得在浪费时间”。

× Actually I don't mind about to do something for a long time because I concerned.

✓ Actually, I don't mind doing something for a long time because I am concerned.

“mind about to do”用法错误，应改为“mind doing”；“I concerned”缺少系动词，应为“I am concerned”。

× I'm a patient person, so sometimes I can accept to do something with long time disruptor with bad emotion.

✓ I'm a patient person, so sometimes I can accept doing something for a long time despite disruptions and bad emotions.

“accept to do”应改为“accept doing”；“with long time disruptor with bad emotion”表达不清，应改为“for a long time despite disruptions and bad emotions”，更符合英语习惯。

× Definitely, I now work as a material planner. This job require a great deal of patience because I need to take more time and carefully to analyze a lot of number to ensure the material can be available at the time and control the.

✓ Definitely, I now work as a material planner. This job requires a great deal of patience because I need to take more time and be careful to analyze a lot of numbers to ensure the material can be available on time and controlled properly.

“This job require”主谓不一致，应为“requires”；“carefully”应为形容词“be careful”；“a lot of number”应为复数“a lot of numbers”；“at the time”应为“on time”；句尾不完整，补充“controlled properly”使句子完整。

× I consider that now I'm patient then when I were a child.

✓ I consider that now I'm more patient than when I was a child.

比较级表达应为“more patient than”；“were”应改为“was”，因为主语是第一人称单数。

× As a child, I cannot understanding control my emotions, especially when we face some more homework need to do and don't have more time to play games.

✓ As a child, I could not understand how to control my emotions, especially when I faced more homework that needed to be done and didn't have much time to play games.

“cannot understanding control”语法错误，应为“could not understand how to control”；“we face”应改为“I faced”，保持时态和主语一致；“some more homework need to do”应为“more homework that needed to be done”；“don't have more time”应为“didn't have much time”。

× It's let me feel frustrated.

✓ It made me feel frustrated.

“It's let me feel”语法错误，应为“It made me feel”，过去时态表达过去的感受。