Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并避免重复。可以用简单句子直接回答问题，然后补充具体例子。

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I rarely get angry or shout at others. For example, even when things don't go as planned, I stay calm and try to solve the problem.

提案: 回答时应注意句子结构和连贯性，使用连接词使表达更流畅，同时具体说明让你不耐烦的情境。

例: I feel impatient when people I talk to have a bad attitude or show disrespect. For instance, if someone interrupts me or ignores my opinions, I find it hard to stay patient.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，建议用更准确的词汇和句子表达感受，并避免重复。

例: I usually feel bored and a bit impatient when I have to do something for a long time, especially if I have other tasks to complete and limited time.

提案: 回答应更完整，避免语法错误，清晰表达作业需要耐心完成的观点。

例: As a student, I have a lot of homework that requires patience to complete carefully. Therefore, my studies help me develop patience.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，建议用完整句子表达观点，并具体说明为什么现在更有耐心。

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have faced more challenges that taught me to stay calm and handle problems carefully.

× My friends always they said they always said that I have a good personality and I I haven't like angry choose one or shout to someone else like once or twice time.

✓ My friends always say that I have a good personality and I don't get angry or shout at someone else, maybe once or twice.

The sentence has redundant pronouns ('they') and repeated phrases ('always said'). Also, 'I haven't like angry choose one' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't get angry'. The phrase 'shout to someone else' should be 'shout at someone else'. The time expression 'like once or twice time' should be 'maybe once or twice'. Suggestions: avoid repeating subjects unnecessarily, use correct verb forms, and correct prepositions.

× I haven't like angry choose one or shout to someone else like once or twice time.

✓ I don't get angry or shout at someone else, maybe once or twice.

The preposition 'to' after 'shout' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at'. Also, the phrase 'like once or twice time' is awkward; 'maybe once or twice' is better. Suggestions: use 'shout at' to indicate the target of shouting.

× The things that make me feel impatient, like it is some situation that the people that I talked to, they have a bad attitude or I think that they don't have respect to me and I will feel impatient.

✓ The things that make me feel impatient are situations where the people I talk to have a bad attitude or I think they don't respect me, and I feel impatient.

The phrase 'don't have respect to me' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'don't respect me'. Also, 'that the people that I talked to' is awkward; 'people I talk to' is better. Suggestions: use 'respect someone' without prepositions.

× It is a truly like bored situation for me and I will feel a little bit impatient and also like I'm boring today because umm, it has took a long time and I don't have so much time.

✓ It is truly a boring situation for me and I feel a little impatient. Also, I feel bored today because it has taken a long time and I don't have much time.

'Bored' is an adjective describing a feeling, while 'boring' describes something that causes boredom. 'It is a truly like bored situation' is incorrect; it should be 'truly a boring situation'. 'It has took' is incorrect past participle; correct form is 'has taken'. 'I don't have so much time' should be 'I don't have much time'. Suggestions: distinguish between 'bored' and 'boring', use correct past participle, and use 'much' with uncountable nouns.

× It has took a long time and I don't have so much time.

✓ It has taken a long time and I don't have much time.

The past participle of 'take' is 'taken', not 'took'. 'Has took' is incorrect; the correct form is 'has taken'. Suggestions: use correct past participle forms with perfect tenses.

× I'm a student and I have a lot of homework to do it really quite a lot and it need me to be patient and finish it clearly.

✓ I'm a student and I have a lot of homework to do. It really requires me to be patient and finish it carefully.

'It need me to be patient' is incorrect; the modal verb or correct verb form is missing. 'Need' should be 'requires' or 'needs'. Also, 'finish it clearly' is awkward; 'finish it carefully' is better. Suggestions: use correct modal verbs or verb forms and appropriate adverbs.

× So I think it is a very it is a task and I should.

✓ So I think it is a difficult task and I should be patient.

The sentence is incomplete and repetitive ('it is a very it is a task'). It lacks a complete thought after 'I should'. Suggestions: complete the sentence with a clear predicate and avoid repetition.

× Yeah, sure, absolutely, because I think I'm 18 years old and I should to be more patient to the world than I was a children because it's has a really big problem that need me to.

✓ Yeah, sure, absolutely, because I think I'm 18 years old and I should be more patient with the world than I was as a child because it has really big problems that need me to be patient.

'I should to be' is incorrect; modal verbs like 'should' are followed by the base verb without 'to'. 'More patient to the world' should be 'more patient with the world'. 'I was a children' is incorrect; 'children' is plural, 'child' is singular. 'It's has' is incorrect; should be 'it has'. The sentence is incomplete at the end. Suggestions: use correct modal verb structure, correct prepositions, singular/plural nouns, and complete sentences.