Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然。建议使用正确的时态和表达方式，如“I lose my temper easily, especially when the surroundings are too noisy.”同时，回答应简洁明了，避免冗余。

例: I am not a very patient person. I tend to lose my temper easily, especially when there is a lot of noise around me.

提案: 回答内容混乱，语法和表达错误较多，逻辑不清晰。建议先明确主题句，然后用连词连接具体细节，表达清楚原因和情绪。

例: My elder daughter talks a lot and her voice is very loud, which often makes me feel frustrated. Sometimes I ask her to be quiet, especially when I need to concentrate.

提案: 回答较完整，但句子结构不够流畅，部分表达重复。建议使用连词使句子更连贯，避免重复表达。

例: I feel tired when I have to do something for a long time, but I usually get used to it and try to concentrate more. This helps me feel confident to finish the task.

提案: 回答中语法错误和表达不清晰，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，明确表达工作内容和耐心的原因。

例: Yes, my job requires patience because I often deal with clients applying for small house permits. They ask many questions, and some speak different languages, which makes communication difficult.

提案: 回答表达不清楚，语法错误较多。建议先给出明确的观点，然后用连词连接具体原因，表达更自然。

例: No, I am not more patient now. I find it harder to concentrate, especially when there is a lot of noise around me that I don't understand.

× I'm easily lost temper, especially when the surrounding are too noisy.

✓ I easily lose my temper, especially when the surroundings are too noisy.

这里'surrounding'应为复数形式'surroundings'，表示周围环境；'lost temper'应为动词短语'lose my temper'，表示发脾气。

× Most of the time my daughters no worries because my elder daughters love to talk so much and it's her voice is very loud that make me feel frustrated in most of the time.

✓ Most of the time, my daughters have no worries because my elder daughter loves to talk so much and her voice is very loud, which makes me feel frustrated most of the time.

'daughters no worries'缺少动词，应为'have no worries'；'elder daughters'应为单数'elder daughter'；'it's her voice is'重复，应改为'her voice is'；'make'应与单数主语'voice'一致，改为'makes'。

× Sometimes I will tell tell her be keep quiet but most of the time I need to concentrate I will get.

✓ Sometimes I will tell her to keep quiet, but most of the time when I need to concentrate, I just get on with it.

'tell tell'重复，应去掉一个；'tell her be keep quiet'结构错误，应为'tell her to keep quiet'；句子后半部分表达不完整，需补充完整表达。

× I feel tired for sure, but if for a long time I would get used to it and I will make myself more concentrated in it, so if I do something for a long time I will feel more confident to finish the task.

✓ I feel tired for sure, but if I do something for a long time, I would get used to it and make myself more concentrated on it, so if I do something for a long time, I will feel more confident to finish the task.

'more concentrated in it'应为'more concentrated on it'，介词用法错误；句子缺少逗号，影响理解。

× Yes, most of the time it is because I have to face the clients who want to apply the small house applications and they usually ask so many questions and because they are mainly from I speak in different languages so they are difficult.

✓ Yes, most of the time it is because I have to face clients who want to apply for small house applications, and they usually ask so many questions. Also, because they mainly speak different languages, it is difficult.

'apply the small house applications'应为'apply for small house applications'；'they are mainly from I speak in different languages'结构混乱，应改为'they mainly speak different languages'；句子过长，需拆分。

× No, I found that I become more easy to get lost of myself because I cannot concentrate easily, especially when they're on the surrounding are fulfilled by noises I cannot understand.

✓ No, I find that I become more easily lost because I cannot concentrate easily, especially when the surroundings are filled with noises I cannot understand.

'more easy'应为'more easily'，副词形式；'get lost of myself'表达错误，应为'become more easily lost'；'they're on the surrounding are fulfilled'结构错误，应为'the surroundings are filled'。