Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question, but it can be improved by avoiding informal phrases like 'A patient guy' and by adding a linking phrase to make it more natural. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary to express impatience.

例: I wouldn't describe myself as a very patient person. In fact, I often feel quite impatient, particularly when I am waiting for results or when others take too long.

提案: Your answer has good content but the phrasing is a bit awkward and could be more natural. Try to use linking words to connect ideas and use simpler, clearer expressions to describe your feelings.

例: I feel impatient when my mind is restless and I am anxious. This nervousness makes it difficult for me to stay calm and patient.

提案: Your answer is well structured and uses linking words effectively. However, some phrases like 'much easier' are unclear. Try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid repetition for better clarity.

例: At first, I feel a bit nervous and overwhelmed by the thought of working for a long time. However, once I begin, I gradually become calmer and more comfortable with the task.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and natural. Avoid sentence fragments and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to vary your vocabulary.

例: As a mechanical engineering student, patience is essential. It helps me study for long hours and maintain a calm mind while working.

提案: Your answer is clear and provides examples, but it can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Avoid repeating words like 'much' and try to be more specific in your examples.

例: I am definitely more patient now than I was as a child. As I have taken on more responsibilities and a heavier workload, my patience has increased accordingly.

× Well, I'm not that much of A patient guy.

✓ Well, I'm not that much of a patient guy.

The article 'A' should be lowercase 'a' because it is in the middle of the sentence and not a proper noun. Articles should be in lowercase unless they start a sentence.

× When I'm not in calm mind, I tend to feel impatient.

✓ When I'm not in a calm mind, I tend to feel impatient.

The phrase 'in calm mind' is missing the article 'a' before 'calm mind' to make it grammatically correct. It should be 'in a calm mind'.

× But as I start doing the work, I become much calmer and much easier.

✓ But as I start doing the work, I become much calmer and much more relaxed.

The adjective 'easier' is incorrectly used to describe a feeling or state. The correct adjective to express becoming less tense or more comfortable is 'relaxed'.

× Because patience helps to study at long hours, also keeps the mind calm and work.

✓ Because patience helps to study for long hours and also keeps the mind calm while working.

The original sentence is a fragment starting with 'Because' and lacks proper conjunctions and prepositions. The corrected sentence connects ideas properly and uses correct prepositions.