Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言不够流畅，有重复和语法错误，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并注意时态和语法的正确使用。

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person, especially when teaching my child and students. Even if they make mistakes, I remain calm and explain things to them kindly.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整，建议注意句子完整性，避免语法错误，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I feel impatient when I have to wait in long lines at supermarkets. It is especially frustrating when people try to cut in front of me, which makes me angry.

提案: 回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，建议简化表达，使用更准确的词汇和句式，确保逻辑清晰。

例: Sometimes I feel impatient when doing something for a long time. However, I remind myself to be patient because good results require time and effort step by step.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和不完整的句子，建议注意主谓一致，避免多余词汇，并使句子完整连贯。

例: Yes, as a teacher, I need to be patient because some children can be naughty and some students are not mature. I spend time teaching them and trying to understand their thoughts.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达不完整的问题，建议注意句子完整性，避免重复和口语化表达，使用更准确的词汇。

例: I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child. In the past, I would get angry if I couldn't do something, but now I give myself more time and try my best to complete tasks step by step.

× Yes, I'm a patient person, at least to teach my child and my students every day when they when they were doing something wrong, I will not bring them.

✓ Yes, I'm a patient person, at least when I teach my child and my students every day. When they do something wrong, I will not scold them.

句子中“when they were doing something wrong”时态不符合上下文，描述的是习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时“do”。另外，“bring them”用词不当，应改为“scold them”表示责备。

× When I line up in the supermarket or in the shop, sometimes I feel impatient because it take a long time to wait for the service and sometimes the some people will try to cut the line that will make me feel angry and.

✓ When I line up in the supermarket or in the shop, sometimes I feel impatient because it takes a long time to wait for the service and sometimes some people will try to cut the line, which makes me feel angry.

“it take”主谓不一致，应为“it takes”。“the some people”中“the”多余，应去掉。句子末尾缺少完整表达，补充“which makes me feel angry”。

× When I have to do something for a long time, sometimes I will feel impatient, but I usually remind myself to be patient because if it wants to have a good result without willing to do the all things, it pays in the end step by step.

✓ When I have to do something for a long time, sometimes I feel impatient, but I usually remind myself to be patient because if I want to have a good result, I have to do all the things step by step, and it pays off in the end.

“if it wants”主语错误，应为“I want”。“without willing to do the all things”表达不清，应改为“I have to do all the things”。“it pays in the end step by step”表达不自然，改为“it pays off in the end”。

× Yes, I'm a teacher. I need to be patient when I'm working because some children is quite naughty and some students is not mature.

✓ Yes, I'm a teacher. I need to be patient when I'm working because some children are quite naughty and some students are not mature.

“some children is”主谓不一致，应为“some children are”。“some students is”同理，应为“some students are”。

× I need to take a long time to teach them and understand what they think. What?

✓ I need to take a long time to teach them and understand what they think.

句尾“What?”无意义，应删除。

× I'm surely more patient than when I was a child. When I was a child if I cannot do something I would get angry, but now I will. I will give myself more time and try my best 2 step by step to do my to do the things.

✓ I'm surely more patient than when I was a child. When I was a child, if I could not do something, I would get angry, but now I will give myself more time and try my best to do things step by step.

“if I cannot do something”时态不一致，应为过去时“could not”。“I will.”句子不完整，应与后文合并。数字“2”应改为“to”，并调整词序使表达更自然。