Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite natural and relevant, but it is a bit lengthy and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly. Also, use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: To be honest, I used to be quite impatient, but as I have grown older, I have learned to be more patient, especially to understand my ageing parents and younger siblings.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentence structures and linking words to express your ideas more effectively.

例: I feel impatient when I put a lot of effort into something and want to see quick results. Even though I know the outcome won't change much, I still find it hard to wait.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to use simpler and correct sentences, and add linking words to improve coherence.

例: I feel uncomfortable doing long tasks, but I understand that in my medical field, it often takes a long time, sometimes two years, to see the best results.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has many grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to organise your ideas clearly, use correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Linking words can help make your answer more coherent.

例: Definitely, as a veterinarian, patience is essential because treating animals requires time and care. Working in this field has taught me a lot about different species and the importance of being patient.

提案: Your answer is relevant but somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and concisely, using linking words to connect your points logically.

例: Yes, I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child. As a kid, I was often impatient and used to mock things, but now as an adult, I understand the importance of patience and have improved a lot.

× I'm very impatient person

✓ I'm a very impatient person

In English, singular countable nouns require an article. 'Person' is singular and countable, so it needs the article 'a' before it.

× learning how to be a patient

✓ learning how to be patient

The word 'patient' here is an adjective, so it should not be preceded by the article 'a'. Using 'a patient' would mean a person receiving medical care, which is incorrect in this context.

× it's very necessary to understand my parents who are becoming old and my younger ones

✓ it's very necessary to understand my parents who are getting old and my younger ones

The phrase 'becoming old' is less common and sounds awkward. 'Getting old' is the correct and natural expression to indicate aging.

× So it's very important to be a patient

✓ So it's very important to be patient

Again, 'patient' is an adjective here and should not have the article 'a' before it.

× Whenever I did a work with lot of effort

✓ Whenever I do work with a lot of effort

The sentence refers to a habitual action, so the present tense 'do' is appropriate. Also, 'work' is uncountable here and does not need 'a'. 'A lot of' requires the article 'a' before 'lot'.

× with lot of effort

✓ with a lot of effort

'Lot' as a quantifier requires the article 'a' before it to form 'a lot of'.

× I want to see the result that fast

✓ I want to see the result that fast

This sentence is acceptable but could be improved for clarity by adding 'so' or 'as soon as possible'. However, since it does not violate the listed grammar problem types, no correction is made.

× I know deep down that the result won't be off much

✓ I know deep down that the result won't be far off

The phrase 'be off much' is incorrect. The correct idiom is 'be far off' meaning the result will not be delayed or different by much.

× I really feel very inconvenient to do for such a long time work

✓ I really feel very uncomfortable doing such long work

'Inconvenient' is not used to describe feelings; 'uncomfortable' is appropriate. Also, 'to do for such a long time work' is awkward; 'doing such long work' is better.

× for two year best result we should wait for some time

✓ for the best result in two years, we should wait for some time

'Two year' should be plural 'two years' and needs the definite article 'the'. The phrase is reordered for clarity.

× in my medical field it's it will take a lot of time to get a result

✓ in my medical field, it will take a lot of time to get a result

The phrase 'it's it will' is redundant; only 'it will' is needed. A comma after 'field' improves readability.

× Definitely I'm I'm an animal doctor, so in my field it's very difficult to be impatient

✓ Definitely, I'm an animal doctor, so in my field it's very difficult to be impatient

Repeated 'I'm' is a typo and should be corrected. A comma after 'Definitely' improves sentence flow.

× and the with only with patients we can treat the cases

✓ and only with patients can we treat the cases

The phrase 'the with only with patients' is incorrect and redundant. Corrected to 'only with patients can we treat the cases' for clarity and grammar.

× and that's how I treat my and after coming to this field, I learned a lot from these animals and species

✓ and that's how I treat my patients. After coming to this field, I have learned a lot from these animals and species

The original sentence is incomplete and confusing. Added 'patients' to complete the thought and split into two sentences for clarity. Present perfect 'have learned' is appropriate here.

× Now I am more patient than a child

✓ Now I am more patient than I was as a child

Comparison should be made with a clause or pronoun referring to the previous state, not just 'a child'.

× I used to mock on everything

✓ I used to mock everything

The verb 'mock' does not require the preposition 'on'. It is directly followed by the object.

× I'm very impatient at that time

✓ I was very impatient at that time

Referring to a past time requires past tense 'was' instead of present tense 'am'.

× I don't know as I was a kid and my parents used to bear with it

✓ I didn't know as I was a kid, and my parents used to bear with it

The sentence refers to past time, so 'don't' should be 'didn't' to match past tense. Added comma for clarity.

× I think I'm a very patient

✓ I think I'm very patient

'Patient' is an adjective here and should not have the article 'a' before it.