Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Apni answer e kichu language error ache, jemon 'passion person' er bodole 'patient person' bola uchit. Apnar answer e kichu sentence structure o clear na, ar kichu part redundant. Apni chesta korun prothome direct question er uttor dite, tarpor specific example dite. Linking words use korun jate answer ta natural lage.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I believe patience is important for success. For example, as a student, I focus carefully on my studies even when I feel bored, and I try to attend all my classes regularly.

提案: Apnar answer e kichu grammar error ache, ar kichu part clear na. Apni chesta korun simple ar clear sentence use korte, ar linking words diye sentence gulo jor kore bolte. Specific example dile answer aro bhalo hobe.

例: I feel impatient when I lose control and get angry. In such situations, I try to avoid the place or people who make me feel impatient, so I can stay calm.

提案: Apnar answer e kichu confusing ar repetitive part ache, jemon 'about my about my work'. Apni chesta korun clear ar simple sentence use korte, ar answer e coherence rakhte linking words use korun. Specific feelings ar karon bolte paren.

例: To be honest, sometimes I feel bored when I have to do something for a long time. However, as a student, I enjoy studying because it helps me learn new things and improve myself.

提案: Apnar answer e kichu grammar ar word choice error ache, jemon 'doesn't patient' er bodole 'is not patient' bola uchit. Apni chesta korun direct question er uttor dite, ar supporting details clear ar relevant rakhte. Linking words use korun coherence er jonno.

例: I am not currently employed, but as a student, patience is very important. If a student is not patient with their studies, they may not succeed in their life.

提案: Apnar answer e kichu grammar error ache, jemon 'I didn't doing' er bodole 'I didn't do' bola uchit. Apni chesta korun sentence gulo simple ar clear korte, ar linking words use kore contrast dekhate. Specific example dile answer aro bhalo hobe.

例: Frankly speaking, I was very restless as a child and I couldn't control myself. But now, I am much more patient and can control my emotions easily.

× Yes, I think I'm a passion person doing any kind of work patiently because it's really important for our career and our life.

✓ Yes, I think I'm a patient person doing any kind of work patiently because it's really important for our career and our life.

The word 'passion' is a noun, but the sentence requires an adjective to describe the person. The correct adjective is 'patient'. So, 'passion person' should be 'patient person'. This is a common mistake where a noun is used instead of an adjective.

× Like as a student I attentively focus my study whenever I feel like boring that time.

✓ As a student, I attentively focus on my studies whenever I feel bored at that time.

The phrase 'Like as a student' is incorrect; 'As a student' is appropriate. Also, 'focus my study' should be 'focus on my studies' because 'focus' requires the preposition 'on' and 'studies' is plural. 'Feel like boring' is incorrect; it should be 'feel bored'. The sentence structure and word choice need correction for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Also I try to attend my class or less on focus identity.

✓ Also, I try to attend my classes and focus more on my identity.

The phrase 'less on focus identity' is unclear and incorrect. Likely, the intended meaning is to focus more on oneself or identity. 'Attend my class' should be plural 'classes' if referring to multiple sessions. Prepositions and word choice need correction for clarity.

× When I lose my control and that time I am really angered and I just try to avoid this situation or this place where I feel like more impatient.

✓ When I lose my control, I get really angry and I try to avoid situations or places where I feel more impatient.

'Angered' is a past participle and not appropriate here; 'angry' is the correct adjective. 'That time' is unnecessary and awkward. 'Feel like more impatient' is incorrect; it should be 'feel more impatient'. The sentence needs restructuring for natural expression.

× So I just about this place and who are the cause of impatientness that time I ignore these people.

✓ So I just avoid these places and the people who cause my impatience at that time.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb after 'I just'. 'Who are the cause' is incorrect; it should be 'who cause'. 'Impatientness' is not a common word; 'impatience' is correct. Pronoun and verb usage need correction for clarity.

× To be honest, it's it is a really disgusting moment, but I think it's a different in my case.

✓ To be honest, it is a really unpleasant moment, but I think it's different in my case.

'It's it is' is redundant; only one is needed. 'Disgusting moment' is not appropriate; 'unpleasant moment' fits better. 'It's a different' is incomplete; 'it's different' is correct. Sentence structure and word choice need correction.

× But I enjoy this moment whenever I busy with any kind of work, like as a student, I'm really studying about my about my work or study.

✓ But I enjoy this moment whenever I am busy with any kind of work, like as a student, I am really studying my work or studies.

'Busy' requires the verb 'am' before it. 'Studying about my work' is incorrect; 'studying my work' or 'studying' alone is correct. Repetition of 'about my' is an error. Prepositions and verb forms need correction.

× To be honest, I'm not job job holder but as a student it's really demanding for every student because if any student doesn't patient about their study then then then they will never overcome and they will never success in their life.

✓ To be honest, I'm not a job holder but as a student, it's really demanding for every student because if any student isn't patient about their studies, then they will never overcome and they will never succeed in their life.

'Job job holder' is a repetition error; 'a job holder' is correct. 'Doesn't patient' is incorrect; it should be 'isn't patient'. 'Study' should be plural 'studies'. 'Never success' is incorrect; 'never succeed' is correct. Singular/plural and verb form errors are present.

× So I think it's really important for us as a student.

✓ So I think it's really important for us as students.

'As a student' is singular, but 'us' is plural, so 'as students' is correct to maintain agreement. Preposition and number agreement need correction.

× Frankly speaking that in my childhood I was really crazy.

✓ Frankly speaking, in my childhood, I was really crazy.

The word 'that' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Adding commas improves clarity. The past tense 'was' is correct.

× I didn't doing anything and I don't control, I didn't control myself.

✓ I didn't do anything and I didn't control myself.

'Didn't doing' is incorrect; after 'didn't' the base form 'do' is required. 'I don't control' is present tense and inconsistent; it should be 'I didn't control' to maintain past tense. Verb forms need correction.

× But in this situation or in this moment, I'm really patient and I can easily control myself.

✓ But now, I am really patient and can easily control myself.

'In this situation or in this moment' is wordy and awkward; 'now' is clearer. The rest of the sentence is correct. Simplifying sentence structure improves clarity.