Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then support it with clear reasons. Avoid redundancy and use correct sentence structures. For example, say 'I am usually a patient person, especially with my boss, but I become impatient when I am in a hurry and need to finish my work on time.'

例: I am generally a patient person, especially when dealing with my boss. However, I tend to get impatient when I am in a rush and need to complete my tasks promptly without wasting time.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words. For example, 'I feel impatient mainly when I am in a hurry because I want my work to be completed efficiently and on time.'

例: I feel impatient mainly when I am in a hurry because I want my work to be completed efficiently and within the required time frame.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and incomplete. Start with a clear statement, then explain with linking words. For example, 'When I have to work for a long time, I usually feel bored and tired. Therefore, I take breaks to refresh myself and maintain concentration.'

例: When I have to work for a long time, I usually feel bored and tired. Therefore, I take short breaks to refresh myself and continue working with full concentration and energy.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Give a direct answer and support it with reasons using appropriate vocabulary. For example, 'Yes, my job requires patience because completing tasks effectively needs calmness and focus.'

例: Yes, my job requires patience because completing tasks effectively needs calmness and focus to ensure good results.

提案: Your answer conveys the idea but has grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Try to be concise and use linking words. For example, 'I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have matured and understand that everything takes time.'

例: I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have matured and understand that everything takes time, so I wait calmly for things to happen.

× It's jokingly depend upon the situation there that I'm a patient person, but most of the time I have a patient regarding my boss.

✓ It jokingly depends upon the situation that I'm a patient person, but most of the time I am patient regarding my boss.

The modal verb 'It's' is incorrectly used here; 'It' should be the subject with the verb 'depends' in third person singular form. Also, 'have a patient' is incorrect; 'am patient' is correct to describe a personal quality.

× But sometime when I was in a hurry, I always need my work to be done in a proper time without wasting any time so that I can do my work properly.

✓ But sometimes when I am in a hurry, I always need my work to be done in proper time without wasting any time so that I can do my work properly.

The word 'sometime' should be plural 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'was' should be 'am' to maintain present tense consistency with 'always need'. 'In a proper time' is incorrect; 'in proper time' is the correct phrase.

× There are few situations when I feel impatient, like when I was in a hurry and I want to my work done in a appropriate time.

✓ There are a few situations when I feel impatient, like when I am in a hurry and I want my work done in an appropriate time.

The phrase 'There are few situations' should be 'There are a few situations' to indicate some situations. 'I was' should be 'I am' to keep present tense. 'I want to my work done' is incorrect; it should be 'I want my work done'. 'a appropriate' should be 'an appropriate' because 'appropriate' starts with a vowel sound.

× So at the in that case I became impatient because I need my work to be done in a proper and ina efficiently memorable.

✓ So in that case I become impatient because I need my work to be done properly and efficiently.

The phrase 'at the in that case' is incorrect; it should be 'in that case'. 'Became' should be 'become' to maintain present tense. 'In a proper and ina efficiently memorable' is incorrect and unclear; corrected to 'properly and efficiently' to convey intended meaning.

× As to my opinion, it feels me more when I have to do something or some work for the long time I need a break between them so that I can until my work with the proper concentration and with the full of energy.

✓ In my opinion, I feel tired when I have to do some work for a long time; I need a break in between so that I can continue my work with proper concentration and full energy.

'As to my opinion' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'In my opinion'. 'It feels me more' is incorrect; should be 'I feel tired' or similar. 'For the long time' should be 'for a long time'. 'Until my work' is incorrect; should be 'continue my work'. 'With the full of energy' should be 'with full energy'.

× And most of the time I feel bored. In that case I take break or I.

✓ Most of the time I feel bored. In that case, I take a break.

The sentence 'I take break or I.' is incomplete and incorrect. It should be 'I take a break.' Also, 'take break' requires the article 'a'.

× I think the average oblique while patients because in my opinion if we're doing any work, it needs some patience so that the work is done in an effective manner and we get our outfit in a well and in a good manner.

✓ I think the average person needs patience because, in my opinion, if we are doing any work, it needs some patience so that the work is done effectively and we get our output well and in a good manner.

'Oblique while patients' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'person needs patience'. 'We're' should be 'we are' for clarity. 'Outfit' is incorrect; should be 'output'. 'In a well' is incorrect; should be 'well'.

× Honestly speaking, when I was a child I was not as much as patients in my today's life because as a child I was a very small child and I wanted my and I wanted everything on my time.

✓ Honestly speaking, when I was a child I was not as patient as I am today because I was very young and I wanted everything on my time.

'Patients' is incorrect; should be 'patient' (adjective). 'In my today's life' is incorrect; should be 'as I am today'. 'I wanted my and I wanted' is redundant and incorrect; simplified to 'I wanted'.

× When I say I wanted and at the time I want it.

✓ When I say I wanted it, I wanted it at that time.

The sentence is incomplete and confusing. Corrected to clarify the intended meaning with proper pronoun use and sentence structure.

× But now I am well matured that everything takes time.

✓ But now I am mature enough to understand that everything takes time.

'Well matured' is incorrect; 'mature' is the correct adjective. The sentence structure is improved to convey the intended meaning clearly.