Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt rõ ràng ý muốn nói. Ngoài ra, nên dùng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết.

例: No, I am not a patient person because I tend to rush and sometimes forget important things when I am in a hurry. However, I want to become a teacher in the future, so I am trying to be more patient to teach children effectively and with care.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và tránh mâu thuẫn trong câu (ví dụ: bạn nói "become patient" trong khi ý muốn nói ngược lại). Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có liên kết logic giữa các ý.

例: Many things make me feel impatient. For example, during rush hour, I often feel impatient because I want to reach my destination quickly and avoid stress. Also, when I forget something important, I get angry and try to solve the problem as soon as possible.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá rõ ràng nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "stay study" nên là "study" hoặc "stay studying") và sử dụng từ nối để câu văn mạch lạc hơn. Bạn cũng nên đa dạng từ vựng để tránh lặp lại từ.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I usually feel uncomfortable, impatient, and tired because it can be boring. For example, if I study for several hours without taking a break, I start to feel exhausted, which makes the task even harder.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp số nhiều/số ít (ví dụ: "offer" nên là "job" hoặc "career", "teacher needs" nên là "teachers need"). Câu trả lời cần hoàn chỉnh và rõ ràng hơn, tránh câu bị bỏ dở hoặc không đầy đủ ý.

例: Yes, my future job requires me to be patient because I want to become a teacher. Teachers need to be patient to explain difficult concepts and support children in different situations. For example, if children are very active and sometimes cause damage, teachers must remain calm and handle the situation carefully.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: "don't didn't", "less basin" không đúng). Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để truyền đạt ý tốt hơn.

例: No, I think I was more patient when I was a child because I had fewer responsibilities and more free time. Now, I have a busy schedule and many tasks to complete, which makes me feel less patient than before.

× No, I'm not a patient person because I'm tend to be a quickly person and sometimes forget something important when I'm in rush hour forever.

✓ No, I'm not a patient person because I tend to be a quick person and sometimes forget something important when I'm in a rush hour forever.

The phrase 'I'm tend' is incorrect because 'tend' should not be used with 'am' in this context; it should be 'I tend'. Also, 'quickly' is an adverb but here an adjective 'quick' is needed to describe 'person'. Additionally, 'in rush hour forever' is awkward; it should be 'in a rush hour' with the article 'a'.

× However, I want to become a teacher in the future so I love to learning.

✓ However, I want to become a teacher in the future so I love learning.

After 'love', the verb should be in the gerund form without 'to', so 'love learning' is correct, not 'love to learning'.

× Impatient to teach children more effectively and greater care.

✓ I am impatient to teach children more effectively and with greater care.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. Adding 'I am' completes the sentence. Also, 'greater care' should be preceded by 'with' to be grammatically correct.

× Well, there are many things that makes me feel impatient.

✓ Well, there are many things that make me feel impatient.

The relative pronoun 'that' refers to 'things' which is plural, so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes' to agree in number.

× For example, during the rush hour, I often become patient because I want to reach my destination quickly and avoid the stress.

✓ For example, during rush hour, I often become impatient because I want to reach my destination quickly and avoid stress.

The original sentence contradicts the context; 'become patient' should be 'become impatient' to match the meaning. Also, 'the rush hour' is better as 'rush hour' without 'the'. 'Avoid the stress' is better as 'avoid stress' for general meaning.

× Another reason is that I forget something important which make me feel angry and impatient to resolve the issues as possible.

✓ Another reason is that I forget something important which makes me feel angry and impatient to resolve the issues as soon as possible.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'something important' (singular), so the verb should be 'makes' not 'make'. Also, 'as possible' is incomplete; it should be 'as soon as possible'.

× Well, when I have to do something for a long time, I usually feel uncomfortable and impatient and angry because it's quite tiring and boring.

✓ Well, when I have to do something for a long time, I usually feel uncomfortable, impatient, and angry because it's quite tiring and boring.

The sentence is correct grammatically but adding commas between adjectives improves clarity.

× For example, if I stay study for several hours without a break time, I start feeling exhausted.

✓ For example, if I study for several hours without a break, I start feeling exhausted.

The phrase 'stay study' is incorrect; 'study' alone is sufficient. Also, 'without a break time' is better as 'without a break'.

× Yes, my future offer require me to be more patient because I want to become a teacher in the future.

✓ Yes, my future offer requires me to be more patient because I want to become a teacher in the future.

The subject 'offer' is singular, so the verb should be 'requires' to agree in number.

× Teacher needs to be patient, explain difficult definitions and support their children with different situations.

✓ Teachers need to be patient, explain difficult concepts, and support their students in different situations.

'Teacher' should be plural 'Teachers' to generalize the statement. 'Definitions' is better replaced with 'concepts' for clarity. 'Their children' is incorrect; 'their students' is appropriate. Also, 'with different situations' should be 'in different situations'.

× For example, if children are very active and damage many things we need to have.

✓ For example, if children are very active and damage many things, we need to be patient and understanding.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a main clause after the conditional. Adding a complete main clause corrects the sentence.

× No, I think I was more patient when I was a kid because I in the past I had fewer responsibility and more free time and I don't didn't have anything to do.

✓ No, I think I was more patient when I was a kid because in the past I had fewer responsibilities and more free time and I didn't have anything to do.

'Responsibility' should be plural 'responsibilities' to match 'fewer'. 'Don't didn't' is incorrect; only 'didn't' is needed. The phrase 'I in the past I' is redundant; 'in the past' alone suffices.

× But then in the present I have many busy schedule and many tasks to complete which make me feel less basin than before.

✓ But now, I have a busy schedule and many tasks to complete which make me feel less patient than before.

'Many busy schedule' is incorrect; 'a busy schedule' is correct. 'Less basin' is a typo and should be 'less patient'. 'In the present' is better replaced with 'now' for naturalness.