Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use the correct word 'patient' instead of 'pleasant' to avoid confusion. Also, improve grammar by saying 'when I face a situation' and 'thinking of a solution'. Keep your answer concise and clear, and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For example, when I face a problem at work, I stay calm and think carefully before making any decisions.

提案: Focus on clearer sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words like 'such as' properly and avoid repetition. For example, say 'delays in meetings or public transport' and 'poor internet connection' to be more specific and natural.

例: I feel impatient when important things are delayed, such as meetings or public transport. Also, a poor internet connection can make me frustrated, especially when I need to finish work online.

提案: This answer is unclear and contains many errors. Try to express your feelings clearly and use simple sentences. For example, say 'I try to be patient and think about the next step carefully when doing something for a long time.' Avoid filler words and unclear phrases.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I try to be patient and focus on what I should do next. For example, when cooking, I plan each step carefully.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'I work at an OP shop where customers often want to chat, so I need to be patient with them.'

例: Definitely, I work at an OP shop where customers often want to chat. Therefore, I need to be patient and listen to them carefully.

提案: Try to organise your answer clearly and avoid hesitation. Use past and present tenses correctly. For example, say 'I was more impatient as a child, especially with homework and exam results, but now I am more patient.'

例: I was more impatient when I was a child, especially with homework and exam results that did not meet my expectations. However, I am more patient now.

× when I facing a situation at work

✓ when I am facing a situation at work

The verb 'facing' needs an auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense correctly. Without 'am', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× and thinking the solution out for solving the problem

✓ and thinking the solution through to solve the problem

The phrase 'thinking the solution out' is awkward; 'thinking the solution through' is the correct idiomatic expression. Also, 'for solving' should be 'to solve' to express purpose correctly.

× such as delay the meeting or delay the public transportation time or through the Internet

✓ such as delays to meetings, delays in public transportation, or issues with the Internet

The original sentence misuses 'delay' as a verb without proper structure and uses 'through the Internet' incorrectly. The correction uses appropriate noun forms and prepositions to clarify meaning.

× Connection can make me feel impatient, for example, when I try to finish work online the connection.

✓ For example, a poor Internet connection can make me feel impatient when I try to finish work online.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Reordering and adding 'poor' clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× I've tried to uh, give many patients and to kill my brand and my my to thinking of what is the next step should I do, for example making the cooking.

✓ I've tried to be patient and calm, thinking about what the next step should be, for example, when cooking.

The original sentence is confusing and contains incorrect phrases like 'give many patients' and 'kill my brand'. The correction clarifies intent and corrects grammar and vocabulary.

× Some customer have want to chat with you, have more talk, have some small talk to you.

✓ Some customers want to chat with you, have more talk, and have some small talk with you.

'Customer' should be plural 'customers' to agree with 'some'. Also, 'have want' is incorrect; 'want' alone suffices. Preposition 'to' should be 'with' in 'small talk with you'.

× So at that time you have be patient to them.

✓ So at that time you have to be patient with them.

The modal verb phrase 'have be' is incorrect; it should be 'have to be'. Also, the preposition 'to' should be 'with' when referring to patience towards someone.

× Maybe umm I feel but I feel I'm impatient person when I was a child

✓ Maybe, umm, I feel I was an impatient person when I was a child

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'I feel I'm impatient person when I was a child' is inconsistent; it should be 'I feel I was an impatient person when I was a child'.

× because of the homework or exam results didn't have what I expect.

✓ because of the homework or exam results not being what I expected.

The original sentence lacks a subject for 'didn't have' and uses incorrect tense. The correction uses a gerund phrase and past tense to express the idea properly.