Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer wa shizen de, shōsai o fukumeru koto wa yoi desu ga, bunpō no shōsai to eigo no seikaku-sa o kōjō suru hitsuyō ga arimasu. Tatoeba, 'I work at a Chrome school where many children are noisy, but I can teach them patiently without getting angry.' to iu fū ni, yoku tsunagatta bunshō o tsukutte kudasai.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For example, I work at a Chrome school where many children can be noisy, but I always teach them patiently without getting angry.

提案: Kotae wa jūbun ni shōsai de wa arimasen. Bunpō no machigai mo arimasu. Motto seikaku ni, rikai shi yasui bunshō o tsukutte kudasai. Tatoeba, 'I feel impatient when my brother plays games while I am trying to study because it distracts me.' to iu fū ni setsumei shite kudasai.

例: Honestly, I feel impatient when my brother plays games while I am studying because it distracts me and makes me stressed.

提案: Kotae wa yoku tsunagatte imasu ga, motto shizen de, fukusū no setsumei o tsukatte, rikai o fukameru koto ga dekimasu. Tatoeba, 'I can concentrate on tasks for a long time without difficulty because I enjoy focusing on my work.' to iu fū ni shite kudasai.

例: I can concentrate on tasks for a long time without difficulty because I enjoy focusing on my work. People around me often say I have good concentration, and I agree with them.

提案: Kotae wa rikai shiyasui desu ga, eigo no seikaku-sa to bunpō o kōjō suru koto ga dekimasu. Tatoeba, 'My job at the Chrome school requires me to be very patient because I teach children who need extra attention.' to iu fū ni setsumei shite kudasai.

例: My job at the Chrome school requires me to be very patient because I teach children who need extra attention and care.

提案: Kotae wa yoku tsunagatte imasu ga, eigo no seikaku-sa o kōjō suru tame ni, motto shizen na hyōgen o tsukatte kudasai. Tatoeba, 'I think I am more patient now than when I was a child because I used to get angry easily and quarrel with friends, but now I remain calm.' to iu fū ni shite kudasai.

例: I think I am more patient now than when I was a child because I used to get angry easily and quarrel with friends, but now I remain calm and handle situations better.

× I am working on in a Chrome school and there are many children's this.

✓ I am working in a Chrome school and there are many children there.

The phrase 'working on in' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'working in' when referring to a place. Also, 'children's this' is incorrect; it should be 'children there' to indicate their presence. Using correct prepositions clarifies the meaning.

× there are many children's this.

✓ there are many children there.

The word 'children's' is a possessive form and incorrect here; the plural noun 'children' should be used without an apostrophe to indicate multiple kids.

× there are many things that makes me feel impatient.

✓ there are many things that make me feel impatient.

The subject 'things' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' instead of 'makes' to agree in number.

× If if my brother is playing game what I'm studying, I I feel stressed and.

✓ If my brother is playing a game while I'm studying, I feel stressed.

The sentence has repeated words ('If if', 'I I') and lacks clarity. 'Playing game what I'm studying' is incorrect; it should be 'playing a game while I'm studying'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly and needs completion.

× I work at the Chrome school. Uh, so my job is to treat with those children and teach them patiently about subjects.

✓ I work at the Chrome school. So my job is to deal with those children and teach them patiently about subjects.

The phrase 'treat with' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'deal with' when referring to managing or handling people. Using correct prepositions improves clarity.

× So it requires a strong patience.

✓ So it requires strong patience.

'Patience' is an uncountable noun and does not take the adjective 'strong' with an article 'a'. The correct form is 'strong patience' without 'a'.

× I I'm very easy to get angry and always quarrel with friends.

✓ I was very easy to get angry and always quarreled with friends.

The sentence refers to past behavior ('when I was a child'), so past tense should be used: 'was' instead of 'am', and 'quarrel' should be in past tense 'quarreled'.