Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 'impatient' 앞에 관사 'an'이 필요하며, 'this day' 대신 'these days'가 적절합니다. 또한, 문장을 더 명확하고 간결하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I don't consider myself a patient person. However, these days I am trying to improve my self-control by practicing meditation.

提案: 'lose my patient'는 잘못된 표현이며, 'lose my patience'가 맞습니다. 또한, 'occasions' 대신 'situations'가 더 자연스럽고, 구체적인 예시를 더 명확하게 설명하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: I lose my patience in situations like traffic jams and when public services are slow.

提案: 문법 오류가 많고, 'exhausting'은 피로를 주는 대상에 쓰이며, 자신이 느끼는 감정을 표현할 때는 'exhausted'가 맞습니다. 문장을 간결하고 정확하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: When I take long tests, I often feel exhausted and tired. Therefore, I drink coffee to help me concentrate.

提案: 답변이 비교적 명확하지만, 좀 더 자연스럽고 풍부한 표현을 사용하면 좋겠습니다. 예를 들어, 'tolerance' 대신 'understanding'이나 'empathy'를 사용할 수 있습니다.

例: Yes, definitely. As a nurse, I need to be very patient and understanding to care for my patients effectively.

提案: 문장이 매우 부자연스럽고 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 'SIM'은 오타로 보이며, 'impatient'의 철자도 틀렸습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 재구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I have become more patient since my childhood. I realized I was impatient, so I created routines to improve my concentration.

× I am quite uh impatient person.

✓ I am quite an impatient person.

The adjective 'impatient' needs an article 'an' before it when used with a singular countable noun 'person'. This is a common article usage error.

× So this day I trying to improve myself control so I do meditation.

✓ So these days I am trying to improve my self-control, so I do meditation.

The verb 'trying' needs an auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense. Also, 'this day' should be 'these days' to indicate a period of time. 'Myself control' should be 'my self-control' as a noun phrase.

× Occasions make me lose my patient, such as traffic congestion and public services.

✓ Occasions make me lose my patience, such as traffic congestion and public services.

The noun 'patience' is the correct form to express the quality of being patient. 'Patient' is an adjective or a noun meaning a person receiving medical care, so it is incorrect here.

× When I handle tests that requires a long hours, I often feel exhausting and tired.

✓ When I handle tests that require long hours, I often feel exhausted and tired.

The relative clause 'that requires' should be 'that require' because 'tests' is plural. Also, 'a long hours' is incorrect; it should be 'long hours' without 'a'. 'Exhausting' is an adjective describing something that causes tiredness; the correct word to describe how the person feels is 'exhausted'.

× Tiring.

✓ I feel tired.

The word 'tiring' is an adjective describing something that causes tiredness, not a feeling. To express the feeling, 'tired' should be used.

× Therefore I drink coffee to boost my concentration.

✓ Therefore, I drink coffee to boost my concentration.

A comma is needed after 'Therefore' to separate the introductory adverb from the main clause.

× SIM become more patient.

✓ I have become more patient.

'SIM' appears to be a typo for 'I'. Also, the present perfect tense 'have become' is appropriate to indicate change over time.

× Then my childhood since I've noticed that I I am a inpatient person, I made my routine to improve my concentration.

✓ Since my childhood, I have noticed that I am an impatient person, so I made a routine to improve my concentration.

The sentence was fragmented and unclear. 'Then my childhood since' is incorrect; 'Since my childhood' is correct. 'I I' is a repetition error. 'Inpatient' should be 'impatient'. 'Made my routine' should be 'made a routine'. The conjunction 'so' connects the two clauses logically.