Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik karena langsung menjawab pertanyaan dengan kalimat topik yang jelas. Namun, Anda perlu memperbaiki tata bahasa dan membuat kalimat lebih alami serta menghindari pengulangan kata 'patient'. Cobalah untuk menambahkan detail yang lebih spesifik dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih lancar.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person, especially because being a mother requires me to stay calm and understanding with my children.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada kesalahan dalam penggunaan kata seperti 'I am in Rust' yang tidak tepat. Anda perlu memperbaiki tata bahasa dan menjelaskan alasan dengan lebih spesifik dan logis. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

例: I feel impatient when my children don't listen to me because I believe it's important for them to respect my guidance.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan ada kalimat yang tidak lengkap atau tidak jelas. Anda perlu memperbaiki tata bahasa, membuat kalimat yang lengkap, dan menggunakan kata penghubung agar jawaban lebih koheren dan efektif.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I usually get bored if I don't enjoy the activity. However, if I like what I'm doing, I can stay focused and enjoy it for hours.

提案: Jawaban Anda mengandung kesalahan tata bahasa dan kurang jelas. Anda perlu memperbaiki struktur kalimat dan menjelaskan dengan lebih spesifik bagaimana pekerjaan Anda menuntut kesabaran. Hindari pengulangan dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami.

例: Yes, my job requires me to be patient, especially when dealing with people who have different personalities that may challenge my patience.

提案: Jawaban Anda sudah menjawab pertanyaan, tetapi ada kesalahan tata bahasa dan penggunaan kata yang kurang tepat seperti 'in my child' dan 'more passion'. Perbaiki kalimat agar lebih alami dan gunakan kata yang sesuai konteks.

例: Yes, I believe I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have gained a lot of life experience that has taught me to stay calm.

× Yes, I'm a patient person because I'm a mother, so I always be patient with my children.

✓ Yes, I'm a patient person because I'm a mother, so I am always patient with my children.

The modal verb 'be' is incorrectly used here. Instead of 'always be patient', the correct form is 'am always patient' to match the present tense and subject 'I'.

× If my children didn't listen to me, I could become more impatient.

✓ If my children don't listen to me, I could become more impatient.

The sentence is a conditional statement about a possible present or future situation, so the correct form is 'don't listen' (present tense) instead of 'didn't listen' (past tense).

× It is because I am in Rust.

✓ It is because I am in a rush.

The word 'Rust' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'in a rush', which means being in a hurry. This is a vocabulary error related to preposition usage and word choice.

× I want my children to respect what I said.

✓ I want my children to respect what I say.

The verb tense should be present ('say') to match the ongoing desire, not past ('said'). This is an incorrect use of verb tense with pronouns.

× If it is the activity that I don't like, sometimes I can get more, can get bored sometimes.

✓ If it is an activity that I don't like, sometimes I can get bored.

The phrase 'can get more' is unclear and unnecessary. Also, 'the activity' should be 'an activity' to indicate any activity. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper article use.

× But if I'm doing the activity that I like, I really love to do that.

✓ But if I'm doing an activity that I like, I really love doing it.

The sentence structure is awkward. 'Love to do that' is better expressed as 'love doing it' for natural English. Also, 'the activity' should be 'an activity'.

× It is because it makes me.

✓ It is because it makes me happy.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object or complement after 'makes me'. Adding 'happy' completes the thought.

× Yes, sometimes my job required I am to be patient.

✓ Yes, sometimes my job requires me to be patient.

The verb 'required' is past tense but the context is present. It should be 'requires'. Also, 'I am' should be 'me' as the object of 'requires'.

× Uh, it's like I must patient when to face people that has so many character and then if it is not fit to my ego and it must.

✓ Uh, it's like I must be patient when facing people who have many different characters, and if it does not fit my ego, I still must be patient.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'must patient' should be 'must be patient' (missing verb 'be'), 'when to face' should be 'when facing', 'people that has' should be 'people who have', 'so many character' should be 'many different characters', and the last part is incomplete and unclear, so it is rephrased for clarity.

× Yes, I think so. I think I'm more patient today than back then in my child.

✓ Yes, I think so. I think I'm more patient today than I was back then in my childhood.

The phrase 'in my child' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in my childhood'. Also, 'than back then' should be 'than I was back then' for clarity.

× It is maybe because I have so many experience in my life, so that's make me feel more passion.

✓ It may be because I have so much experience in my life, so that makes me feel more patient.

'So many experience' is incorrect because 'experience' is uncountable; it should be 'so much experience'. Also, 'that's make' should be 'that makes'. The word 'passion' is likely a mistake for 'patience' given the context.