Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to answer the question directly and clearly. Avoid hesitation and unclear words. Use a simple sentence like 'No, I am not a patient person.' to sound natural and confident.

例: No, I am not a patient person because I often get frustrated when things take too long.

提案: Focus on giving a clear reason for your impatience. Avoid repeating words and unclear phrases. Use linking words to explain your feelings logically.

例: I feel impatient when things don't go as planned because I like to have control over situations.

提案: Try to express your feelings clearly and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repeating words and unclear sentences. Keep your answer concise and relevant.

例: I feel bored when I have to do simple tasks for a long time because they don't challenge me, and I find it hard to stay focused.

提案: Answer directly and explain why your job requires patience. Use correct grammar and avoid unnecessary details that do not relate to patience.

例: Yes, my job requires patience because I often have to perform repetitive tasks that need careful attention.

提案: Give a clear comparison using correct grammar. Use linking words to show contrast and be specific about how your patience has changed.

例: I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have learned to control my emotions better over time.

× No, I'm not uh, I'm I'm heresy person.

✓ No, I'm not, uh, I'm an impatient person.

The word 'heresy' is incorrect here; the student likely meant 'impatient', which is an adjective describing a person. Also, the article 'an' is needed before a singular noun starting with a vowel sound. The sentence should be 'I'm an impatient person.'

× Umm, it is difficult for me to answer. Uh, I cannot answer because umm, I always, uh, I'm, I've, I've, I've lost the flat, flat fluctuated by something bad. So I cannot be patient.

✓ Umm, it is difficult for me to answer. Uh, I cannot answer because, umm, I always, uh, lose my temper when something bad happens. So I cannot be patient.

The original sentence is confusing and contains repeated words and unclear phrases like 'I've lost the flat, flat fluctuated'. The correction clarifies the meaning by using 'lose my temper' which fits the context of impatience. Also, verb tense and sentence structure are corrected for clarity.

× This is a this is boring for me because the doing simple tasks is I can I cannot endure doing time and that's the situation that I do that simple things. So I cannot endure and I feel bad.

✓ This is boring for me because doing simple tasks is hard; I cannot endure doing them for a long time. That's the situation when I do simple things. So I cannot endure and I feel bad.

The original sentence has redundant and incorrect phrases like 'the doing simple tasks is I can I cannot endure doing time'. The correction removes redundancy and clarifies the meaning, using correct verb forms and sentence structure.

× Yes, I'm into Tenkaku. Tutankaku is a famous tourist site. But I have to do a simple tasks. This task is boring for me so I have to be patient for the simple tasks.

✓ Yes, I'm into Tenkaku. Tenkaku is a famous tourist site. But I have to do simple tasks. These tasks are boring for me, so I have to be patient with the simple tasks.

The original sentence has singular/plural inconsistency: 'a simple tasks' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'tasks'. Also, 'Tutankaku' seems a typo for 'Tenkaku'. The correction fixes these issues and improves article and preposition usage.

× No, but I could. I could become a little more patient than younger, but then I was a child.

✓ No, but I could become a little more patient than when I was younger, but that was when I was a child.

The original sentence is awkward and incomplete. 'Than younger' is incorrect; it should be 'than when I was younger'. Also, the sentence is clarified to express the intended meaning properly using past tense and comparative structure.