Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but you can improve coherence by using linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly. Also, try to avoid repeating similar ideas and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person in most situations. For example, I can wait calmly in long queues and endure pain without getting upset. However, when someone is offensive, I find it difficult to stay patient because it affects my mood.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to organize your thoughts clearly, avoid filler words, and use correct grammar. Also, provide a specific example to support your point.

例: Although I am usually patient, I become impatient when I have to wait too long for food. For instance, if my meal is delayed at a restaurant, I start feeling frustrated and lose my patience.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use simpler and clearer sentences, and provide more specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

例: I don't mind doing something for a long time if I know it is important or will help me earn money for my education. For example, I can study for hours if I believe it will improve my skills.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and hesitations. Try to speak more fluently and use correct verb forms. Also, you can add linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, my job requires me to be patient because I am a doctor. Sometimes, my patients are very talkative and cannot stop talking, so I have to be patient and provide them with support.

提案: Your answer is good and mostly clear, but the last sentence is incomplete and there are minor grammatical errors. Try to finish your thoughts completely and check your sentence structure for accuracy.

例: Yes, I believe I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have grown older. I have realized that many things take time to happen. For example, I understand that rushing often leads to mistakes, so I try to stay calm and wait patiently for the right moment. This experience has helped me become a more patient person.

× I am very patient person, but when sometimes, uh, case is the ongoing to some point, uh, after this point, I cannot, uh, be patient and I really, uh, lose my patient and became impatient in this case is maybe eating.

✓ I am a very patient person, but sometimes, uh, when a case is ongoing to some point, uh, after this point, I cannot, uh, be patient and I really, uh, lose my patience and become impatient; in this case, it may be eating.

The sentence misses the article 'a' before 'very patient person' which is necessary for singular countable nouns. 'Lose my patient' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'lose my patience' because 'patience' is an uncountable noun representing the quality. Also, 'became' should be 'become' to maintain present tense consistency. Adding commas and restructuring improves clarity.

× I don't have problem to do something for a long time if I realize this job is important and bring some profit or income for my education or income.

✓ I don't have a problem doing something for a long time if I realize this job is important and brings some profit or income for my education or livelihood.

The phrase 'have problem to do' is incorrect; the correct form is 'have a problem doing' using the gerund. Also, 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with the singular subject 'this job'. Replacing the second 'income' with 'livelihood' avoids repetition and improves clarity.

× I also can do for a long time things if other person has profit.

✓ I can also do things for a long time if another person benefits.

The phrase 'do for a long time things' is awkward; the correct order is 'do things for a long time'. 'Other person' should be 'another person' to refer to an additional individual. 'Has profit' is better expressed as 'benefits' to convey the meaning clearly.

× Yes, my job require from me to be pay patient because I am doctor and my patients are uh, sometimes very talkative and they cannot stop uh, in this situations I umm, have to be patient because they need some support and umm.

✓ Yes, my job requires me to be patient because I am a doctor and my patients are sometimes very talkative and cannot stop. In these situations, I have to be patient because they need some support.

'Job require' should be 'job requires' to agree with the singular subject. 'To be pay patient' is incorrect; it should be 'to be patient'. 'I am doctor' needs the article 'a' before 'doctor'. 'In this situations' should be 'in these situations' to match plural form. Removing filler words improves clarity.

× This experience helps has helped me become.

✓ This experience has helped me become more patient.

The phrase 'helps has helped' is redundant and incorrect; only one auxiliary verb is needed. The sentence is incomplete and needs an object or complement to be clear. Adding 'more patient' completes the thought and corrects the sentence structure.