Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点并给出了例子，但语言有些不自然，且有语法错误，如“think myself”应为“I think I am”，“think stays think things through”表达重复且混乱。建议使用更自然的表达，并注意语法准确。

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For instance, when I encounter emergency situations in daily life, I try to stay calm and think things through carefully before reacting.

提案: 回答内容明确，但句子结构稍显重复，如“waiting in long queues which make me feel uncomfortable and impatient”中“impatient”重复出现。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，避免重复。

例: I feel impatient when I have to wait for a long time, especially in long queues, because it makes me feel uncomfortable and restless.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如“make a same videos”应为“make the same videos”，时态不一致，“felt”应为“feel”。建议注意语法和时态一致性，并丰富细节。

例: I often feel impatient when I have to do something for a long time. For example, I frequently need to make the same videos repeatedly, which makes me feel uncomfortable and bored.

提案: 回答内容相关，但表达稍显笨拙，如“my major requires me to be more patient”可以更自然地表达为“My field of study requires patience”。句子“which took a long time to complete it”中“it”多余。建议简化句子结构。

例: Yes, my field of study requires me to be patient. For example, during my graduate studies, I had to create a documentary on my topic, which took a long time to complete.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但有语法错误，如“than I was a child”应为“than I was when I was a child”，“helps me more mature”应为“helps me become more mature”。建议注意语法准确性。

例: Yes, I believe I am more patient now than I was when I was a child because I have faced more challenges in my life. These experiences have helped me become more mature.

× Yes, I think myself a patient person.

✓ Yes, I think I am a patient person.

这里“think myself”用法错误，应该用“I think I am”来表达“我认为我是”。“myself”是反身代词，不能直接用作谓语动词的宾语。

× I try to stay calm and think stays think things through carefully before reacting.

✓ I try to stay calm and think things through carefully before reacting.

句中“think stays think”是重复且错误的表达，应删除多余的“stays think”，保持动词原形“think”。

× I feel impatient when I have to wait for long time, especially waiting in long queues which make me feel uncomfortable and impatient.

✓ I feel impatient when I have to wait for a long time, especially waiting in long queues which make me feel uncomfortable and impatient.

“wait for long time”缺少冠词，应为“wait for a long time”。

× especially waiting in long queues which make me feel uncomfortable and impatient.

✓ especially waiting in long queues which makes me feel uncomfortable and impatient.

关系代词“which”指代单数“waiting”，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式“makes”。

× I often need to make a same videos for a long time.

✓ I often need to make the same videos for a long time.

“a same videos”中“a”用于单数名词，但“videos”是复数，且“same”前应加定冠词“the”。

× At that time I felt uncomfortable.

✓ At that time, I felt uncomfortable.

此句无语法错误，但加逗号更符合书面表达习惯。

× which took a long time to complete it.

✓ which took a long time to complete.

“complete”后不需要再加宾语“it”，因为“complete”已经包含了完成动作的含义。

× Yes, I believe I am a more patient person now than I was a child because I have experienced more challenges in my life.

✓ Yes, I believe I am a more patient person now than I was a child.

“than I was a child”缺少冠词，应为“than I was a child”。

× This experience helps me more mature.

✓ This experience helps me become more mature.

“helps me more mature”结构错误，应使用动词不定式“helps me become more mature”来表达“使我变得更成熟”。