Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и повторения, что снижает его естественность. Рекомендуется использовать более простые и правильные конструкции, избегать повторов и уточнять мысли более ясно.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person now, although in the past I used to get impatient, especially when I had to wait for someone. I believe patience is an important quality to have.

提案: В ответе есть небольшие ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Рекомендуется использовать более точные слова и связки для логичности, а также избегать лишних пауз и слов-паразитов.

例: I often feel impatient when I am stuck in traffic jams because it wastes my time. However, I try to stay calm and handle such situations more patiently nowadays.

提案: Ответ неполный и содержит грамматические ошибки. Рекомендуется строить предложения более четко, избегать повторов и завершать мысли, чтобы ответ был логичным и полным.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I try to stay calm and focused. Sometimes I feel a bit frustrated, but I remind myself to be patient and keep going.

提案: Ответ нечеткий и содержит много пауз и незавершенных мыслей. Рекомендуется говорить более связно, использовать правильные грамматические формы и завершать предложения.

例: I am a student, so I don't have a job. However, studying at school requires patience and responsibility to complete my tasks well.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и незавершенные предложения. Рекомендуется использовать правильные времена и завершать мысли, чтобы ответ был более естественным и понятным.

例: Yes, I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child because I understand the importance of patience, focus, and responsibility. As a child, I was less patient.

× Honestly nowadays I become patient person, but in the past I was really unpatient in some situations when I need, when I need to wait someone.

✓ Honestly nowadays I become a patient person, but in the past I was really impatient in some situations when I needed to wait for someone.

The sentence misses the article 'a' before 'patient person' which is necessary for singular countable nouns. 'Unpatient' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'impatient'. The verb tense 'need' should be past tense 'needed' to match the past context. Also, 'wait someone' requires the preposition 'for' to be correct.

× Honestly nowadays I become patient person, but in the past I was really unpatient in some situations when I need, when I need to wait someone.

✓ Honestly nowadays I become a patient person, but in the past I was really impatient in some situations when I needed to wait for someone.

'Unpatient' is not a correct adjective; the correct form is 'impatient'.

× Honestly nowadays I become patient person, but in the past I was really unpatient in some situations when I need, when I need to wait someone.

✓ Honestly nowadays I become a patient person, but in the past I was really impatient in some situations when I needed to wait for someone.

'Need' should be in past tense 'needed' to agree with the past time reference 'in the past'.

× Honestly nowadays I become patient person, but in the past I was really unpatient in some situations when I need, when I need to wait someone.

✓ Honestly nowadays I become a patient person, but in the past I was really impatient in some situations when I needed to wait for someone.

'Wait' requires the preposition 'for' when followed by a person or thing.

× Sometimes what makes me feel impatient is fading or uh, stuck in the traffic jam, which is make me impatient and feel a bit frustrated.

✓ Sometimes what makes me feel impatient is fading or, uh, being stuck in a traffic jam, which makes me impatient and feel a bit frustrated.

The phrase 'stuck in the traffic jam' needs the verb 'being' to form the correct gerund phrase. 'Which is make' is incorrect; it should be 'which makes' to agree with singular subject 'which'. Also, 'the traffic jam' should be 'a traffic jam' unless a specific jam is meant.

× Sometimes what makes me feel impatient is fading or uh, stuck in the traffic jam, which is make me impatient and feel a bit frustrated.

✓ Sometimes what makes me feel impatient is fading or, uh, being stuck in a traffic jam, which makes me impatient and feel a bit frustrated.

After 'is', the verb should be in the gerund form '-ing'. 'Stuck' alone is an adjective; to express the action, 'being stuck' is correct.

× Sometimes what makes me feel impatient is fading or uh, stuck in the traffic jam, which is make me impatient and feel a bit frustrated.

✓ Sometimes what makes me feel impatient is fading or, uh, being stuck in a traffic jam, which makes me impatient and feel a bit frustrated.

'Which' refers to a singular subject, so the verb should be 'makes' not 'make'.

× Sometimes what makes me feel impatient is fading or uh, stuck in the traffic jam, which is make me impatient and feel a bit frustrated. But nowadays I'm trying to keep myself and be more calm and handle difficult situations better.

✓ Sometimes what makes me feel impatient is fading or, uh, being stuck in a traffic jam, which makes me impatient and feel a bit frustrated. But nowadays I'm trying to keep calm and be calmer and handle difficult situations better.

The phrase 'keep myself' is awkward; 'keep calm' is the correct expression. Also, 'be more calm' should be 'be calmer' to use the comparative adjective.

× But nowadays I'm trying to keep myself and be more calm and handle difficult situations better.

✓ But nowadays I'm trying to keep calm and be calmer and handle difficult situations better.

'More calm' is less natural than the comparative adjective 'calmer'. Also, 'keep myself' is incorrect; the phrase is 'keep calm'.

× First of all, I always think about the how I need to handle in this situations and how I need to stay for a long time.

✓ First of all, I always think about how I need to handle these situations and how I need to stay for a long time.

'This situations' is incorrect; 'this' is singular demonstrative adjective and 'situations' is plural. The correct phrase is 'these situations'.

× First of all, I always think about the how I need to handle in this situations and how I need to stay for a long time.

✓ First of all, I always think about how I need to handle these situations and how I need to stay for a long time.

'Handle in this situations' is incorrect; the verb 'handle' does not require the preposition 'in' here.

× First of all I trying to keep myself calm and be focused on this in this scenario and I feel a bit frustrated but I.

✓ First of all, I try to keep myself calm and be focused in this scenario, and I feel a bit frustrated but I...

'I trying' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I try' or 'I am trying' depending on tense. The sentence is incomplete but corrected for grammar.

× First of all I trying to keep myself calm and be focused on this in this scenario and I feel a bit frustrated but I.

✓ First of all, I try to keep myself calm and be focused in this scenario, and I feel a bit frustrated but I...

'Be focused on this in this scenario' is awkward; 'be focused in this scenario' is more natural.

× I'm student and I'm not working, but uh, I studying at school and to stay patient, umm, it requires more uh, responsibility and be more uh, think and be more uh.

✓ I'm a student and I'm not working, but uh, I am studying at school and to stay patient, umm, it requires more responsibility and more thinking.

'I studying' is incorrect; it should be 'I am studying' for present continuous tense. Also, 'I'm student' needs the article 'a'. The phrase 'be more uh, think' is incomplete and corrected to 'more thinking'.

× I'm student and I'm not working, but uh, I studying at school and to stay patient, umm, it requires more uh, responsibility and be more uh, think and be more uh.

✓ I'm a student and I'm not working, but uh, I am studying at school and to stay patient, umm, it requires more responsibility and more thinking.

'Responsibility' is uncountable here and used correctly; no plural needed. The phrase 'be more uh, think' is incorrect and replaced with 'more thinking'.

× Yes, absolutely. This time I become more patient compared when I was a child because I understand how it's important to be patient and show how you're focused and have a responsibility.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Now I have become more patient compared to when I was a child because I understand how important it is to be patient and show how focused you are and have responsibility.

'Compared when' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'compared to when'. 'It's important' should be 'important it is' in this structure. 'Show how you're focused' is better as 'show how focused you are'. 'Have a responsibility' should be 'have responsibility' or 'have a sense of responsibility'.

× Yes, absolutely. This time I become more patient compared when I was a child because I understand how it's important to be patient and show how you're focused and have a responsibility.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Now I have become more patient compared to when I was a child because I understand how important it is to be patient and show how focused you are and have responsibility.

'I become' should be present perfect 'I have become' to indicate change over time up to now.