Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和用词不准确，句子结构混乱，建议简化句子，注意时态和词汇的正确使用。

例: No, I am not a patient person. I often feel anxious and nervous when people walk slowly, and I get angry if things are done too slowly.

提案: 回答中有重复和不连贯的表达，建议使用连词使句子更流畅，并且具体说明原因。

例: I feel impatient when I am waiting for the bus or buying breakfast because the staff sometimes work very slowly, which makes me nervous.

提案: 句子结构不正确，词汇使用错误，建议学习正确的形容词和副词用法，并丰富表达。

例: I usually feel impatient, nervous, and anxious when I have to do something for a long time.

提案: 回答重复“quickly prepare food”，建议使用不同表达丰富语言，同时注意句子连贯性。

例: No, my job does not require much patience because we have to prepare food quickly in the breakfast shop. I am a fast worker, so I think I am suitable for this job.

提案: 表达不清晰，语法错误较多，建议简化句子并使用正确的时态和词汇。

例: No, I am not more patient now. When I was a child, I did things slowly, but now I think being fast is important in life.

× No, I'm not a patient person, I always feel anxiety and nervous when people walk slowly and I'm won't quickly so I will very angry about their works too slowly.

✓ No, I'm not a patient person. I always feel anxious and nervous when people walk slowly, and I can't move quickly, so I get very angry about their slow work.

anxiety 是名词，形容情绪时应使用形容词 anxious；nervous 是形容词，前面应加连词 and 连接；'I'm won't quickly' 结构错误，应改为 'I can't move quickly'；'works too slowly' 应改为 'slow work'，work 在此为不可数名词。

× No, I'm not a patient person, I always feel anxiety and nervous when people walk slowly and I'm won't quickly so I will very angry about their works too slowly.

✓ No, I'm not a patient person. I always feel anxious and nervous when people walk slowly, and I can't move quickly, so I get very angry about their slow work.

'angry about their works too slowly' 中的介词使用不当，应为 'angry about their slow work'，表示对工作进度慢感到生气。

× Uh, I think it's that I want to go to school by bus and I buy breakfast, the back breakfast, uh, employee, he makes thing very slowly and I was very nervous and impatient.

✓ Uh, I think it's that I want to go to school by bus and buy breakfast. The breakfast shop employee makes things very slowly, and I was very nervous and impatient.

'buy breakfast, the back breakfast, uh, employee' 句子结构混乱，应拆分为两句；'makes thing very slowly' 中 thing 应为复数 things；时态使用正确。

× Uh, I think it's that I want to go to school by bus and I buy breakfast, the back breakfast, uh, employee, he makes thing very slowly and I was very nervous and impatient.

✓ Uh, I think it's that I want to go to school by bus and buy breakfast. The breakfast shop employee makes things very slowly, and I was very nervous and impatient.

thing 应为复数 things，因为指多个物品。

× I always impatience when I do for a long time things and I feel nervous and anxious.

✓ I always feel impatient when I do things for a long time, and I feel nervous and anxious.

impatience 是名词，句中应使用形容词 impatient；'do for a long time things' 语序错误，应为 'do things for a long time'。

× I always impatience when I do for a long time things and I feel nervous and anxious.

✓ I always feel impatient when I do things for a long time, and I feel nervous and anxious.

'for a long time things' 形容词顺序错误，应为 'things for a long time'。

× No, I don't need to be patient because we need to quickly prepare food and work in the breakfast shop, so we need to quickly prepare food for customer.

✓ No, I don't need to be patient because we need to prepare food quickly and work in the breakfast shop, so we need to prepare food quickly for customers.

'need to quickly prepare' 中副词 quickly 不应拆分动词短语，应放在动词后；customer 应为复数 customers。

× No, I don't need to be patient because we need to quickly prepare food and work in the breakfast shop, so we need to quickly prepare food for customer.

✓ No, I don't need to be patient because we need to prepare food quickly and work in the breakfast shop, so we need to prepare food quickly for customers.

customer 应为复数 customers，因为指多个顾客。

× So I'm a very fast person, so I'm very fit for this job.

✓ So I'm a very fast person, so I'm very suitable for this job.

'fit for this job' 虽然常用，但更正式和准确的表达是 'suitable for this job'。

× No, now I'm not patient. When I was a child and a very moved very slowly do anything is slowly.

✓ No, now I'm not patient. When I was a child, I moved very slowly and did everything slowly.

原句时态混乱，'moved' 和 'did' 应用过去式，且句子结构不完整，需补充主语和谓语。

× No, now I'm not patient. When I was a child and a very moved very slowly do anything is slowly.

✓ No, now I'm not patient. When I was a child, I moved very slowly and did everything slowly.

'When I was a child and a very moved...' 中 'and a' 连接错误，应使用逗号分隔句子。

× But now I realize fast is a key in life. You need to run with the time.

✓ But now I realize that being fast is key in life. You need to keep up with the times.

'fast' 作为形容词需用动名词形式 'being fast'；'run with the time' 表达不自然，应为 'keep up with the times'。