Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ve anlamlı, ancak bazı cümleler biraz tekrar ediyor ve daha akıcı hale getirilebilir. Ayrıca, 'I get angry' ifadesi yerine daha çeşitli duygusal ifadeler kullanabilirsiniz. Cümlelerinizi birbirine bağlamak için bağlaçlar ekleyerek akıcılığı artırabilirsiniz.

例: Generally, I consider myself a patient person; however, there are times when I lose my temper, especially if situations become overwhelming. This happens quite often, and I usually feel disappointed with myself afterward.

提案: Cevabınız doğrudan ve anlaşılır, ancak daha spesifik örnekler vererek ve bağlaçlar kullanarak cevabınızı geliştirebilirsiniz. Ayrıca, zaman uyumuna dikkat ederek cümlenizi daha doğru hale getirebilirsiniz.

例: I become really impatient when things don't go as planned, such as when meetings are delayed or unexpected problems arise, which often makes me feel quite frustrated.

提案: Cümlenizde zaman ve anlam açısından bazı hatalar var. Daha doğal ve akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, düşüncelerinizi bağlaçlarla daha iyi bağlayarak cevabınızı geliştirebilirsiniz.

例: While having routines can be beneficial, I often feel bored if I have to do the same task for a very long time without any change.

提案: Cümlenizde zaman uyumu ve dilbilgisi hataları mevcut. Ayrıca, daha çeşitli kelimeler kullanarak ve cümleleri bağlaçlarla bağlayarak cevabınızı geliştirebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, my job requires a great deal of patience because my patients expect high-quality treatment. Therefore, I need to explain everything clearly and remain calm throughout the process.

提案: Cümlenizde bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve doğal olmayan ifadeler var. Daha doğru zaman kullanımı ve bağlaçlarla cümlelerinizi geliştirebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I believe I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have matured, can think more clearly, and manage my emotions better.

× I got really impatient when things don't go as planned and I can get quite frustrated.

✓ I get really impatient when things don't go as planned and I can get quite frustrated.

The sentence mixes past tense 'got' with present tense 'don't' and 'can'. To maintain consistency and match the general statement, 'got' should be corrected to 'get' to reflect present tense usage.

× Sometimes it could be beneficial to have routines, however, I think I got really bored when something's going to stand forever.

✓ Sometimes it can be beneficial to have routines, however, I think I get really bored when something's going to last forever.

The modal verb 'could' is changed to 'can' to express general possibility in present tense. 'Got' is past tense and should be 'get' to maintain present tense consistency. Also, 'stand' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'last' to indicate duration.

× Yes, I had to be very patient with my patients and they are expecting me to high quality treatment.

✓ Yes, I have to be very patient with my patients and they are expecting me to provide high quality treatment.

The past tense 'had to' is inconsistent with the present tense 'are expecting'. It should be 'have to' to indicate ongoing requirement. Also, 'to high quality treatment' is missing a verb; 'to provide' is needed for correct meaning.

× I have to tell them exactly what's going to happen and I need patience a lot.

✓ I have to tell them exactly what's going to happen and I need a lot of patience.

The phrase 'patience a lot' is incorrect. The correct quantifier usage is 'a lot of patience' to express the amount of patience needed.

× Yes, I think I am more patient than I was a child because I got matured and I can think more clearly and I can manage my emotions more directly.

✓ Yes, I think I am more patient than I was a child because I have matured and I can think more clearly and I can manage my emotions more directly.

The phrase 'got matured' is incorrect past tense usage. The correct present perfect form is 'have matured' to indicate a change over time up to the present.