Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add specific details without filler words like 'uh' or 'well'. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'it depends on the situation' without examples. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person, but sometimes I get impatient when I am in a hurry, such as when I am late for an appointment.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Provide a direct response explaining specific reasons or situations that make you feel impatient. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I feel impatient when I have to wait in long lines because it makes me anxious and stressed about wasting time.

提案: Your answer is too brief and ends abruptly. Provide a complete sentence with specific feelings and reasons. Use linking words to explain your feelings clearly.

例: I feel nervous when I have to do something for a long time because I worry about losing focus and making mistakes.

提案: Avoid repeating the same idea. Use correct grammar and vocabulary, such as 'patience' instead of 'patient' as a noun. Provide specific examples of how patience is important in your job.

例: Yes, patience is essential in my job because I often have to deal with difficult customers and solve problems calmly.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Provide a clear comparison with specific reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I used to get easily frustrated, but now I have learned to stay calm in difficult situations.

× Sometime I got in a hurry.

✓ Sometimes I get in a hurry.

The word 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency (plural). Also, 'got' is past tense, but the context suggests a habitual action, so 'get' in present tense is appropriate.

× And then I am very impatient. Then I feel very stressed about what is happening with me. That's why I'm.

✓ I become very impatient and feel very stressed about what is happening to me. That's why.

The original sentences are fragmented and incomplete ('That's why I'm' is incomplete). Combining the ideas into a complete sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I feel very nervous when I do something for a long time, that's why.

✓ I feel very nervous when I do something for a long time; that's why.

The original sentence is a comma splice. Using a semicolon or separating into two sentences corrects the sentence structure.

× Yes, patient is a very crucial for everyone according to my job.

✓ Yes, patience is very crucial for everyone according to my job.

'Patient' is an adjective or noun meaning a person receiving medical care; the correct noun for the quality is 'patience'. Also, 'a very crucial' is incorrect because 'crucial' is an adjective and does not take 'a' before it.

× Patient is a very important task in my job.

✓ Patience is a very important quality in my job.

Again, 'patient' should be 'patience' to refer to the quality. Also, 'task' is incorrect here; 'quality' fits better.

× Yes, I am a more patient as compared to the child because in during a child period I was easily get a hurry as compared to the today's life.

✓ Yes, I am more patient compared to when I was a child because during childhood I used to get in a hurry easily compared to today.

'A more patient' is incorrect; 'more patient' is correct without 'a'. 'The child' should be 'when I was a child' for clarity. 'In during a child period' is incorrect; 'during childhood' is correct. 'I was easily get a hurry' is ungrammatical; 'I used to get in a hurry easily' is correct. 'Compared to the today's life' should be 'compared to today'.