Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 일부 단어 사용이 부적절합니다. 예를 들어 'prostrated'와 'bleed'는 문맥에 맞지 않으며, 'practice'도 부적절하게 사용되었습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 적절한 단어를 사용하도록 연습하세요.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For instance, when the subway is delayed, I try to stay calm and use the time to listen to music, which helps me relax.

提案: 답변이 비교적 명확하고 구체적이지만, 연결어를 사용하여 문장 간 논리적 흐름을 강화하면 더 좋습니다. 또한 'delayed meeting' 대신 'a delayed meeting'처럼 관사를 정확히 사용하세요.

例: I feel impatient when I have to wait for something important, such as a delayed meeting or a slow Internet connection. For example, when I'm trying to finish work online and the connection keeps dropping, it disrupts my focus and makes me anxious.

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 'prostrated'는 부적절한 단어이며, 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 재구성해야 합니다. 또한, 불필요한 중복 표현을 피하고, 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 해야 합니다.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I usually feel frustrated at first because I don't have a clear plan. However, over time, I try to stay calm and organize my tasks to manage better.

提案: 'pharmaceutical'는 직업명이 아니므로 'pharmacist'로 수정해야 합니다. 또한, 'patients'와 'patients'의 혼동을 주의하고, 문장을 더 자연스럽게 다듬으세요.

例: I don't have a job right now, but my dream job is to be a pharmacist. It requires a lot of patience because helping patients recover and improve their health is very important.

提案: 답변이 불완전하고 문법적으로 틀렸으며, 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 과거와 현재를 비교하는 명확한 문장을 구성하도록 연습하세요.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. For example, I used to get angry quickly, but now I can stay calm in difficult situations.

× Instead of getting prostrated, I use the time to listen to music or bleed, which helps me remain practice and relax.

✓ Instead of getting frustrated, I use the time to listen to music or read, which helps me remain calm and relax.

The original sentence contains incorrect word choices ('prostrated' and 'bleed') and the phrase 'remain practice' is incorrect. 'Prostrated' is not appropriate here; 'frustrated' fits the context. 'Bleed' is likely a typo for 'read'. 'Remain practice' should be 'remain calm'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Instead of getting prostrated, I use the time to listen to music or bleed, which helps me remain practice and relax.

✓ Instead of getting frustrated, I use the time to listen to music or read, which helps me remain calm and relax.

The phrase 'remain practice' is incorrect because 'practice' is a noun or verb, not an adjective or adverb. The correct adjective here is 'calm' to describe the state of the subject.

× I feel impatient when I have to wait for something important such as delayed meeting or a slow Internet connection.

✓ I feel impatient when I have to wait for something important such as a delayed meeting or a slow Internet connection.

The phrase 'delayed meeting' requires an article 'a' because 'meeting' is a singular countable noun. Omitting the article causes grammatical error.

× When I have to do something for a long time, at first I would feel some prostrated because I don't have any clear plan.

✓ When I have to do something for a long time, at first I would feel some frustration because I don't have any clear plan.

'Prostrated' is incorrectly used; the correct noun form to express the feeling is 'frustration'. Also, 'some' is used correctly with 'frustration' as an uncountable noun.

× When I have to do something for a long time, at first I would feel some prostrated because I don't have any clear plan.

✓ When I have to do something for a long time, at first I would feel some frustration because I don't have any clear plan.

'Prostrated' is an adjective describing a physical state, but the intended meaning is an emotional state, so 'frustration' (a noun) is appropriate here.

× But I think over time UMM would be stay calm to organize organizing.

✓ But I think over time I would stay calm to organize and plan.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun usage and awkward phrasing. 'UMM' is filler and should be removed. 'Would be stay calm' is incorrect; it should be 'would stay calm'. 'Organize organizing' is redundant; 'organize and plan' is clearer.

× For example, I want to be a pharmaceutical and it is very important to be patients when helping patients recover and improve their health.

✓ For example, I want to be a pharmacist and it is very important to be patient when helping patients recover and improve their health.

'Pharmaceutical' is an adjective or noun related to the industry, but the correct noun for a person is 'pharmacist'. Also, 'patients' should be 'patient' (adjective) to describe the quality needed.

× For example, I want to be a pharmaceutical and it is very important to be patients when helping patients recover and improve their health.

✓ For example, I want to be a pharmacist and it is very important to be patient when helping patients recover and improve their health.

'Patients' is a plural noun, but here the adjective 'patient' is needed to describe the quality required.

× Compared to my childhood, I can say that I be competent because, for example, when I was younger I was.

✓ Compared to my childhood, I can say that I am more competent because, for example, when I was younger I was not.

The verb 'be' is incorrectly used; it should be 'am' to agree with the subject 'I' in present tense. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs clarification; adding 'more' and completing the thought improves clarity.