Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For instance, when I visit a friend and they are still getting ready, I remain calm and wait without getting angry.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và liên kết ý để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I feel impatient when I watch YouTube ads that force me to wait five seconds before skipping, but then another ad appears immediately, which is quite frustrating.

提案: Bạn nên sắp xếp câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và chính xác hơn.

例: I enjoy doing activities that take a long time, such as building Lego or solving puzzles, because it makes me feel relaxed and satisfied when I complete something big from small pieces.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ vựng chính xác. Hãy trình bày ý tưởng một cách mạch lạc và có liên kết.

例: Although I am currently a student, I believe patience will be an essential skill in my future career to help me improve and succeed.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể và dùng từ vựng phù hợp.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. For example, I used to cry and get angry easily, but now I have learned to stay calm, especially after my mother advised me to be more patient.

× I'm pretty chill and calm when something happened to me, uh, for example, if I hang out with my friend, I travel, I walk into his house and he still prepare, I still uh, waste him, waste him without angry.

✓ I'm pretty chill and calm when something happens to me, uh, for example, if I hang out with my friend, I travel, I walk into his house and he is still preparing, I still uh, wait for him without getting angry.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'happened' (past tense) instead of 'happens' (present tense) to describe a general situation. Also, 'he still prepare' lacks the third person singular 's' and should be 'he is still preparing' to indicate ongoing action. 'Waste him' is incorrect; likely intended 'wait for him'. 'Without angry' should be 'without getting angry' to use the correct form of the adjective as a verb phrase.

× I think that the thing that make me feel impatient that is uh, some art in the YouTube that said that you need to wait 5 seconds to skip that ad and after 5 seconds they show a new app and that make me pretty angry.

✓ I think that the thing that makes me feel impatient is, uh, some ads on YouTube that say you need to wait 5 seconds to skip the ad and after 5 seconds they show a new ad and that makes me pretty angry.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'thing'. 'Some art' is incorrect; it should be 'some ads'. 'In the YouTube' should be 'on YouTube' as the correct preposition. 'Said' should be 'say' to match the present tense. 'App' should be 'ad' (advertisement). 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'that'.

× I think that the thing that make me feel impatient that is uh, some art in the YouTube that said that you need to wait 5 seconds to skip that ad and after 5 seconds they show a new app and that make me pretty angry.

✓ I think that the thing that makes me feel impatient is, uh, some ads on YouTube that say you need to wait 5 seconds to skip the ad and after 5 seconds they show a new ad and that makes me pretty angry.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'YouTube'; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to content on a platform.

× I still uh, waste him, waste him without angry.

✓ I still uh, wait for him without getting angry.

The verb 'wait' requires the preposition 'for' when indicating the person being waited for. 'Waste him' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation or misuse of 'wait for him'.

× Uh, I pretty like the feeling of doing something with a long time like uh, Lego, uh Lego do or do puzzle is make me feel pretty relaxed 'cause I can finish cause the feeling of make a big thing from a small thing, small piece of Lego.

✓ Uh, I pretty much like the feeling of doing something for a long time like, uh, Lego, uh Lego building or doing puzzles makes me feel pretty relaxed because I can finish and get the feeling of making a big thing from small pieces of Lego.

The phrase 'with a long time' is incorrect; it should be 'for a long time' to indicate duration. 'Lego do or do puzzle is make me' is ungrammatical; it should be 'Lego building or doing puzzles makes me' to have correct subject-verb agreement and verb forms. 'Cause' should be 'because' for clarity. 'Make a big thing' should be 'making a big thing' to use the gerund form after 'the feeling of'.

× Lego do or do puzzle is make me feel pretty relaxed 'cause I can finish cause the feeling of make a big thing from a small thing, small piece of Lego.

✓ Lego building or doing puzzles makes me feel pretty relaxed because I can finish and get the feeling of making a big thing from small pieces of Lego.

The subject 'Lego building or doing puzzles' is singular and requires the verb 'makes' instead of 'make'. Also, 'make' should be 'making' after 'the feeling of'.

× Now I'm still a student, but I think that in the future, patient is the crucial skill, uh, that I need to adopt to fire shop and get improve in the career later.

✓ Now I'm still a student, but I think that in the future, patience is a crucial skill that I need to adopt to find a job and improve in my career later.

'Patient' is an adjective; the noun form 'patience' is needed here. 'Adopt to fire shop' is incorrect; likely intended 'adopt to find a job'. 'Get improve' should be 'improve'. Modal verbs are not directly involved but the sentence needs correction for word choice and clarity.

× Now I'm pay, I'm more patient when I was when I was shy, uh, for example, I, uh, when I was a child, I usually cry and angry with everything.

✓ Now I'm more patient than when I was shy. For example, when I was a child, I usually cried and got angry with everything.

'I'm pay' is incorrect and unclear; likely a mispronunciation or error and should be removed. 'Cry and angry' mixes verb and adjective incorrectly; it should be 'cried and got angry' to use past tense verbs. Also, 'more patient when I was when I was shy' is confusing and should be 'more patient than when I was shy'.

× But now my mom sent me told me that I need to patient.

✓ But now my mom told me that I need to be patient.

'Sent me told me' is incorrect; 'sent me' should be removed. 'Need to patient' is incorrect; it should be 'need to be patient' to use the correct verb form after 'need to'.