Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and incomplete sentences. Make your answer more natural and clear by completing your thoughts and using linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I am a patient person, but sometimes people take advantage of this, which makes me feel anxious and angry. For example, even my sister or mother sometimes treat me unfairly because of my patience.

提案: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific examples using linking words to improve coherence.

例: I feel impatient when people ask me questions with obvious answers because it seems unnecessary. For instance, when someone asks me something that I think is very clear, I get anxious and impatient.

提案: Reduce filler words and complete your sentences. Use linking words to contrast your feelings about different tasks and provide specific examples.

例: It depends on the task. When I do something I enjoy, like making puzzles, I can do it for a long time without getting bored. However, if the task is boring, I find it annoying and hard to stay focused.

提案: Clarify your sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain why your job requires patience and provide specific examples.

例: Yes, my job in a medical laboratory requires a lot of patience, especially when dealing with elderly patients or those who are difficult. For example, I need to be calm and attentive when answering their questions.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to explain the change in your patience over time and provide specific reasons.

例: Yes, I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child. Previously, I would get anxious over small things, but as I have grown older and changed my mindset, I have become more patient.

× some people get advantage of these features of me

✓ some people take advantage of these features of me

The correct phrase is 'take advantage of', not 'get advantage of'. 'Take advantage of' is the proper collocation in English.

× which makes me, uh, so anxious and angry. Even sometimes my sister or my mother, uh, they can day treat me in a way which may.

✓ which makes me, uh, so anxious and angry. Even sometimes my sister or my mother, uh, they can treat me in a way which may.

The word 'day' is incorrect here and seems to be a typo or misused word. Removing 'day' corrects the sentence structure.

× when people ask me a question which the answer is clear

✓ when people ask me a question whose answer is clear

The relative pronoun 'whose' is used to indicate possession or association, which is correct here instead of 'which'.

× when I making a puzzle, I can stay there forever

✓ when I am making a puzzle, I can stay there forever

The verb 'making' needs an auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense correctly.

× the patient who are not patients

✓ the patients who are not patients

The subject 'patients' should be plural to agree with the plural verb 'are'.

× I could distract it and get anxious with a simple point

✓ I could get distracted and get anxious with a simple point

The verb 'distract' is transitive and needs an object; here, the passive form 'get distracted' is appropriate.