Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct forms of words and avoid redundancy. For example, use 'impatient' instead of 'impatience person' and avoid repeating ideas. Keep your answer clear and concise with proper grammar.

例: No, I am not a patient person because I tend to get excited about things, so it's hard for me to stay calm and patient.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, explain why others' slow responses make you impatient, and avoid repeating phrases.

例: I feel impatient when people don't respond as quickly as I do because I like to finish tasks fast and waiting slows me down.

提案: Use the correct adjectives and expressions. Instead of 'embarrassed', use 'bored' or 'frustrated' if that fits better. Also, explain your feelings clearly and avoid grammatical errors.

例: I feel bored when I have to do something for a long time because I lose interest quickly and find it hard to stay focused.

提案: Use correct verb tenses and word forms. For example, say 'my job requires me to be patient' and avoid repeating ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

例: Yes, my job requires me to be patient because we work in a group and need to cooperate with others effectively.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence clarity. Use correct comparative forms like 'more patient' and avoid repetition. Also, explain reasons clearly and logically with linking words.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I used to be the youngest in my family and was less tolerant. Now, with more responsibilities at home, I have learned to be more patient.

× No, I am not a impatience person because I am always very crazy about things so it's impossible to keep a patience in my mind.

✓ No, I am not an impatient person because I am always very crazy about things so it's impossible to keep patience in my mind.

The adjective 'impatience' is incorrect here; the correct adjective form is 'impatient'. Also, 'a patience' is incorrect because 'patience' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article 'a'. Use 'keep patience' without 'a'.

× I always think I always do things quickly when someone don't respond like my speed then I it's make me feel impatience.

✓ I always think I do things quickly, and when someone doesn't respond at my speed, it makes me feel impatient.

The verb 'don't' should be 'doesn't' to agree with the singular subject 'someone'. 'It's make' is incorrect; it should be 'it makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'impatience' should be 'impatient' as an adjective describing the feeling.

× I always think I always do things quickly when someone don't respond like my speed then I it's make me feel impatience.

✓ I always think I do things quickly, and when someone doesn't respond at my speed, it makes me feel impatient.

The word 'impatience' is a noun, but here an adjective 'impatient' is needed to describe the feeling. Also, 'like my speed' should be 'at my speed' to correctly express the idea.

× I always think I always do things quickly when someone don't respond like my speed then I it's make me feel impatience.

✓ I always think I do things quickly, and when someone doesn't respond at my speed, it makes me feel impatient.

The preposition 'like' is incorrectly used; 'at' is the correct preposition to indicate the manner or rate of response.

× I feel embarrassed when I have to do something for a long time because I quickly feel boring so I don't keep things for long time.

✓ I feel embarrassed when I have to do something for a long time because I quickly feel bored, so I don't keep doing things for a long time.

'Boring' describes something that causes boredom, but here the speaker describes their own feeling, so 'bored' is correct. Also, 'keep things' is unclear; 'keep doing things' is more appropriate. 'For long time' needs the article 'a' to be 'for a long time'.

× I feel embarrassed when I have to do something for a long time because I quickly feel boring so I don't keep things for long time.

✓ I feel embarrassed when I have to do something for a long time because I quickly feel bored, so I don't keep doing things for a long time.

The phrase 'for long time' is missing the article 'a'; it should be 'for a long time' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, my job required to be a patience because we worked in Group, so we have to cooperate with others. That's why we required I required patience.

✓ Yes, my job requires me to be patient because we work in a group, so we have to cooperate with others. That's why we require patience.

The verb 'required' is past tense but the context suggests present tense 'requires'. 'Required to be a patience' is incorrect; it should be 'requires me to be patient'. 'Worked in Group' should be 'work in a group' with the article 'a'. 'I required patience' is incorrect; 'we require patience' is appropriate.

× Yes, my job required to be a patience because we worked in Group, so we have to cooperate with others. That's why we required I required patience.

✓ Yes, my job requires me to be patient because we work in a group, so we have to cooperate with others. That's why we require patience.

The noun 'Group' needs the article 'a' to be 'a group'. Also, 'a patience' is incorrect because 'patience' is uncountable and does not take 'a'.

× Yes, I am more patience now than when I was a child because when I was a child I am a youngest child child in my home.

✓ Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because when I was a child I was the youngest child in my home.

'Patience' is a noun; the adjective 'patient' is needed here. 'I am a youngest child' is incorrect; it should be 'I was the youngest child' with the definite article 'the' and past tense 'was' to match the time frame.

× Yes, I am more patience now than when I was a child because when I was a child I am a youngest child child in my home.

✓ Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because when I was a child I was the youngest child in my home.

The verb 'am' should be 'was' to correctly refer to the past time 'when I was a child'.

× So everything I received very impatiently now I have a responsibilities of my home so.

✓ So, I received everything very impatiently. Now, I have responsibilities at home.

The original sentence is run-on and unclear. It needs to be split into two sentences for clarity. 'Responsibilities' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'Of my home' should be 'at home' to express possession or location correctly.