Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول أن تقدم إجابة أكثر وضوحًا وتفصيلاً بدلاً من إجابة قصيرة وغير محددة. أضف جملة موضوعية تشرح رأيك في الصبر مع بعض التفاصيل الداعمة.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I usually stay calm in difficult situations and try to think before I react.

提案: حاول تحسين تركيب الجمل واستخدام روابط منطقية لتوضيح الأفكار بشكل أفضل. كما يُفضل استخدام مفردات أكثر دقة وتجنب التكرار.

例: Because I have ADHD, I often feel impatient with many daily tasks, which can be exhausting; however, I am trying to be more patient by reminding myself to stay calm in real-life situations.

提案: حاول استخدام روابط مثل "however" أو "on the other hand" لجعل الإجابة أكثر ترابطًا. كما يُفضل تحسين القواعد اللغوية واستخدام مفردات متنوعة.

例: It depends on the task; if it's something interesting, I can spend all day on it without feeling tired. However, if it's boring, I get exhausted very quickly.

提案: حاول تقديم إجابة أكثر تفصيلاً مع جملة موضوعية واضحة. تجنب الكلمات غير الضرورية مثل "uh" وقدم تفاصيل داعمة عن طبيعة عملك.

例: No, my job as a dental designer does not require much patience because the tasks are usually quick and straightforward.

提案: حاول تحسين تركيب الجمل واستخدام تعبيرات أكثر دقة. استخدم روابط لتوضيح الأفكار وجعل الإجابة أكثر سلاسة.

例: Yes, I am more patient now because I can understand and manage my feelings better than when I was a child.

× With ADHD that I have it, it's making me feel impatient about a lot of things in my daily routine and this make me feel exhausted, but I'm trying to really encourage the real world with a little more patience.

✓ With ADHD that I have, it's making me feel impatient about a lot of things in my daily routine and this makes me feel exhausted, but I'm trying to really encourage the real world with a little more patience.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'this'. Also, the pronoun 'it' after 'ADHD that I have' is unnecessary and should be removed for clarity.

× It depends about what this thing means to me.

✓ It depends on what this thing means to me.

The verb 'depend' is followed by the preposition 'on', not 'about'. Using 'about' here is incorrect.

× If it's really interesting topic, I'll prefer to spend all day in it with no exhausting.

✓ If it's a really interesting topic, I'll prefer to spend all day on it without getting exhausted.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'really interesting topic'. Also, 'in it' should be 'on it' when referring to spending time on a topic. 'No exhausting' is incorrect; it should be 'without getting exhausted' to express the intended meaning.

× But if it's really boring topic, boring topic I will feel exhausting in one minute.

✓ But if it's a really boring topic, I will feel exhausted in one minute.

The article 'a' is missing before 'really boring topic'. Repeating 'boring topic' is redundant. 'Feel exhausting' is incorrect; the correct form is 'feel exhausted' to describe the person's feeling.

× No it doesn't. Uh, I am working as a dental designer.

✓ No, it doesn't. Uh, I work as a dental designer.

The present continuous 'I am working' suggests a temporary action, but the context implies a permanent job, so simple present 'I work' is more appropriate. Also, a comma is needed after 'No' for correct punctuation.

× Yes I am, I would say that I feel I can think about my feeling more that make me understandable for myself 1st and hold my feeling better than when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I am. I would say that I feel I can think about my feelings more, which makes me more understandable to myself first and helps me control my feelings better than when I was a child.

A comma is needed after 'Yes'. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' when referring to emotions in general. 'That make me understandable' is incorrect; it should be 'which makes me more understandable'. 'For myself 1st' is awkward; 'to myself first' is better. 'Hold my feeling' should be 'control my feelings' for clarity and correctness.