Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then support it with specific examples. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to sound more natural and confident. Also, complete your sentences to make your ideas clear.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because when faced with unpleasant situations, I stay calm and think carefully about the best solution. For example, when I encounter problems at work, I take time to analyze them before reacting.

提案: Provide a complete and coherent answer by finishing your thoughts. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid excessive hesitation sounds. Be specific about why waiting in line makes you impatient.

例: Waiting in a long line at the supermarket makes me impatient because I feel like I am wasting my time, especially when there are many cashier stations available but only a few are open.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking phrases to enhance coherence and naturalness.

例: My feelings depend on the task. For example, I enjoy working on genetic experiments in the lab because they are fascinating and fulfilling. On the other hand, I often feel frustrated when doing household chores for a long time since they tend to be repetitive and exhausting.

提案: Complete your sentences and avoid filler words to make your answer clearer and more confident. Explain why patience is important in your job with specific examples.

例: Definitely. I work on genetic projects that require a lot of patience because when challenges arise, I need to troubleshoot problems carefully and efficiently to achieve accurate results.

提案: Try to reduce hesitation and organize your answer with clear linking words. Provide more specific examples to illustrate how your patience has improved.

例: Absolutely. When I was a child, I was very impatient because I always wanted to play and have fun immediately. However, now I am much more patient, especially at work and in my personal life, where I understand the importance of waiting and persistence.

× Uh, I think I'm a patient person because, umm, then something uh, happened in my life that, uh, it is not pleasant.

✓ Uh, I think I'm a patient person because something unpleasant happened in my life.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unnecessary fillers and repeated subjects, causing confusion. Simplifying the sentence and removing fillers improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Usually I try to stay calm and think about the best solution for it and especially at.

✓ Usually, I try to stay calm and think about the best solution for it, especially at difficult times.

The original sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Adding a proper ending clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence structure.

× Sometimes this thing, uh, in a line in the supermarket makes me impatient because I just think that I umm, waste uh, my time and sometimes, uh, you know, I thought that OK, there are a lot of uh, cashier station. Why none of.

✓ Sometimes, waiting in line at the supermarket makes me impatient because I feel like I am wasting my time. Sometimes, I think, 'OK, there are a lot of cashier stations. Why is none of them open?'.

The original sentence is fragmented, contains filler words, and has incomplete thoughts. Reorganizing the sentence and correcting singular/plural forms improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Why none of.

✓ Why is none of them open?

The phrase 'Why none of' is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding 'is' and completing the thought corrects the sentence and addresses subject-verb agreement.

× Definitely, umm, uh, usually I work on a genetic project and I should be patient because, uh, most of the time if you are facing a challenges and we need to, uh, troubleshoot, uh, efficiently and.

✓ Definitely. Usually, I work on a genetic project and I should be patient because most of the time, when facing challenges, we need to troubleshoot efficiently.

The original sentence is fragmented, contains filler words, and ends abruptly. Removing fillers and completing the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.