Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。より明確で自然な表現を使い、簡潔に答えることを心がけましょう。例えば、感情の説明は具体的にし、冗長な言葉を避けることが重要です。

例: No, I am not a very patient person because I often feel stressed and get angry easily.

提案: 答えが不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。質問に直接答え、具体的な状況を説明し、接続詞を使って論理的に話を展開しましょう。

例: That's a difficult question, but I usually feel impatient when I see someone moving very slowly, especially if they take a long time to do simple tasks.

提案: 回答が断片的で意味が伝わりにくいです。状況に応じた感情を明確に述べ、接続詞を使って文をつなげる練習をしましょう。

例: It depends on the situation. If the task is exciting, I feel very happy, but if it's a simple and boring task, I usually feel unhappy.

提案: 文法的な誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭です。仕事での忍耐力の必要性を明確に述べ、理由を具体的に説明しましょう。

例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because my students often don't pay attention, so I need to find ways to keep them motivated.

提案: 表現が不自然で、理由の説明も適切ではありません。比較をするときは、明確な基準を示し、自然な表現を使いましょう。

例: I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have learned to control my emotions better.

× No I'm not uh this is because I'm offering feel like stressful and got angry so I don't think so.

✓ No, I'm not. This is because I often feel stressed and get angry, so I don't think so.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure issues, including missing punctuation and incorrect verb forms. 'Offering feel like stressful' is incorrect; it should be 'often feel stressed'. Also, 'got angry' should be 'get angry' to maintain present tense consistency.

× Uh, it's difficult question, but I get frustrated when I see the slowly person like uh, barely take uh.

✓ Uh, it's a difficult question, but I get frustrated when I see a slow person who barely takes their time.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'difficult question' and 'slowly person' is incorrect; it should be 'slow person'. Also, 'barely take' should be 'barely takes' to agree with the singular subject 'person'.

× Uh, it's difficult question, but I get frustrated when I see the slowly person like uh, barely take uh.

✓ Uh, it's a difficult question, but I get frustrated when I see a slow person who barely takes their time.

'Slowly' is an adverb but should be the adjective 'slow' to describe 'person'. Also, 'barely take' should be 'barely takes' to agree with the singular subject.

× It depends on the situation. Uh, it's uh, something exciting thing. I'm very happy part. It's a simple task. I not unhappy.

✓ It depends on the situation. Uh, if it's something exciting, I'm very happy. If it's a simple task, I'm not unhappy.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'Something exciting thing' is redundant; 'something exciting' suffices. 'I'm very happy part' is unclear and corrected to 'I'm very happy'. 'I not unhappy' is missing the auxiliary verb 'am'.

× Yes, I always in need because my students don't pay attention to me so I wonder if I keep them too motivated.

✓ Yes, I always need to be patient because my students don't pay attention to me, so I wonder if I can keep them motivated.

'I always in need' is incorrect; it should be 'I always need to be patient'. Also, 'keep them too motivated' is awkward; 'keep them motivated' is better. Added 'can' to express ability.

× Yes, I always in need because my students don't pay attention to me so I wonder if I keep them too motivated.

✓ Yes, I always need to be patient because my students don't pay attention to me, so I wonder if I can keep them motivated.

The sentence needed correction in pronoun usage and verb forms to make it grammatically correct and clear.

× I'm very patient, more than when I was a kid, because I have intelligence more than kids.

✓ I'm more patient now than when I was a kid because I am more intelligent than kids.

The comparison 'more than when I was a kid' is acceptable but 'I have intelligence more than kids' is incorrect; it should be 'I am more intelligent than kids' to correctly compare intelligence.