Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「I always tried to be on a diet however I could」は「I have always tried to go on a diet in any way I could」のように自然な表現に改善できます。また、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いでしょう。

例: No, I'm not a patient person. For example, I have always tried to go on a diet in any way I could, but I have never succeeded because it's very difficult.

提案: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。例えば、「doing exercise for being on a diet」は「exercising to lose weight」の方が自然です。また、「it's hard for me to continuing something」は「it's hard for me to keep doing something」と修正しましょう。接続詞を使って理由を明確に述べることも重要です。

例: Well, exercising to lose weight makes me feel impatient because it's hard for me to keep doing something for a long time.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で文法的にも誤りが多いです。意味を明確にし、簡潔で自然な表現にする必要があります。例えば、「I feel stressed when I have to do something for a long time because I prefer to do things quickly.」のように言い換えましょう。

例: I feel stressed when I have to do something for a long time because I prefer to finish tasks quickly.

提案: 文法と語順の誤りがあり、意味が伝わりにくいです。「I'm not working person」は「I'm not working now」や「I'm a student」などに修正し、「many assignment makes me to be patient」は「many assignments require me to be patient」と自然に表現しましょう。

例: I'm not working now, but as a student, many assignments require me to be patient.

提案: 文法と表現が不自然で意味が伝わりにくいです。「then I children I could study long」は「when I was a child, I could study for a long time」と修正し、全体を自然な英語に直しましょう。

例: Yes, maybe I am. For example, when I was a child, I could study for a long time, so I think I have become more patient now.

× I always tried to be on a diet however I could.

✓ I have always tried to be on a diet however I could.

The sentence refers to an experience up to the present, so the present perfect tense 'have tried' is appropriate instead of the simple past 'tried'.

× I have never succeeded it because it's hard.

✓ I have never succeeded because it's hard.

The verb 'succeed' does not take a direct object, so 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× Well, doing exercise for being on a diet makes me feel impatient.

✓ Well, exercising to be on a diet makes me feel impatient.

The phrase 'doing exercise for being on a diet' is awkward; 'exercising to be on a diet' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× That's because it's hard for me to continuing something.

✓ That's because it's hard for me to continue something.

After 'to' (infinitive marker), the base form of the verb 'continue' should be used, not the '-ing' form.

× I feel so stressed because I'm not. Happy at doing something long time I'm a person who want to do.

✓ I feel so stressed because I'm not happy doing something for a long time. I'm a person who wants to do things quickly.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs restructuring for clarity and correct verb forms.

× I'm not working person so I'm not sure but as I am student many assignment makes me to be patient.

✓ I'm not a working person, so I'm not sure, but as a student, many assignments make me be patient.

Missing articles ('a'), plural form 'assignments', and incorrect use of 'makes me to be' which should be 'make me be'.

× many assignment makes me to be patient.

✓ many assignments make me be patient.

'Assignment' should be plural 'assignments' to agree with 'many', and the verb should be 'make' to agree with plural subject.

× Yes, maybe I am. For example I could be patient for studying, then I children I could study long.

✓ Yes, maybe I am. For example, I could be patient when studying, and when I was a child, I could study for a long time.

The sentence lacks proper tense and structure; 'then I children' is incorrect and should be 'when I was a child'. Also, 'study long' should be 'study for a long time'.