Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在词汇使用错误（如“passionate”应为“patient”），句子结构不够清晰，表达不够自然。建议注意词汇准确性，简洁明了地表达观点，并避免语法错误。

例: I am not a very patient person. For example, when people do not finish their work properly and it affects me, I feel quite angry. However, I try to stay calm and find a solution instead.

提案: 回答表达不够连贯，语法和词汇使用有误，且内容不够具体。建议使用连词使句子更流畅，明确表达原因，并提供具体细节。

例: I feel impatient when I have many tasks on my to-do list and cannot complete them step by step. However, I have learned that good management skills can help reduce my stress.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且内容缺乏具体细节。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的词汇，并清楚表达感受和计划。

例: I feel comfortable when I have to do something for a long time because I can plan a strategy to finish it. First, I organize my day, and then I prepare myself mentally to complete the task.

提案: 回答中词汇使用不准确（如“passion personality”应为“patient personality”），句子结构不够清晰。建议注意词汇准确性，简洁表达工作要求和耐心的重要性。

例: Yes, my job requires me to be patient. As a part-time assistant, I need to handle a lot of detailed information carefully, which takes time and focus.

提案: 回答中词汇使用错误（“passionate”应为“patient”），表达不够自然且含糊。建议准确使用词汇，清晰表达成长和耐心的关系。

例: I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child. After many years of teamwork, I have practiced and improved my patience, becoming a better person.

× Well, I'm not very passionate person.

✓ Well, I'm not a very passionate person.

这里缺少冠词“a”，因为“person”是单数可数名词，前面需要加不定冠词“a”。

× For instance sometimes when people they don't finish their work properly and when it will affect me I will feel very angry.

✓ For instance, sometimes when people don't finish their work properly and it affects me, I feel very angry.

句中“people they”重复使用主语，且“when it will affect me”时态和结构不正确，应改为“it affects me”。此外，句子缺少逗号，连接词使用不当。

× But I try to stay calm and find a solution with instead.

✓ But I try to stay calm and find a solution instead.

“with”在这里多余且不正确，应去掉。

× Well, sometimes when I have too many To Do List tests, need to finish and I cannot step by step to complete that, I will feel frustrated.

✓ Well, sometimes when I have too many tasks on my To Do List that need to be finished and I cannot complete them step by step, I feel frustrated.

“To Do List tests”表达不准确，应为“tasks on my To Do List”。“need to finish”缺少主语和被动结构，应改为“that need to be finished”。“cannot step by step to complete that”结构错误，应改为“cannot complete them step by step”。

× But after all this experience, I find out good management skills cannot just reduce my stress.

✓ But after all this experience, I find that good management skills can not only reduce my stress.

“find out”用法不当，应为“find that”。“cannot just reduce”表达不清，应改为“can not only reduce”。

× Well, I will feel comfortably because I need to plan the whole strategy to finish the thing.

✓ Well, I will feel comfortable because I need to plan the whole strategy to finish the task.

“comfortably”是副词，修饰动词，而这里应使用形容词“comfortable”来描述感受。

× And then second, I will calculate my, uh, my day and then the last prepare my good minor to face the thing I need to finish.

✓ And then secondly, I will plan my day and finally prepare my good mindset to face the tasks I need to finish.

“calculate my day”表达不当，应为“plan my day”。“the last”应为“finally”或“lastly”。“good minor”应为“good mindset”。“the thing”应为复数“tasks”。

× Well yes it's required and I have a part time job as assistant and I need to figure out lots of detail information.

✓ Well yes, it's required and I have a part-time job as an assistant and I need to figure out lots of detailed information.

“part time”应为复合形容词“part-time”。“assistant”前应加冠词“an”。“detail information”应为形容词“detailed information”。

× So this may take a lot of my time and I need to be very careful to focus on every figures.

✓ So this may take a lot of my time and I need to be very careful to focus on every figure.

“every”后应接单数名词，“figures”应改为单数“figure”。

× So you still need a passion personality.

✓ So you still need a passionate personality.

“passion”是名词，修饰“personality”应使用形容词“passionate”。

× Well, I would say definitely I'm more passionate compared to maybe 10 years ago because after so many years I've been through lots of teamwork.

✓ Well, I would say definitely I'm more patient compared to maybe 10 years ago because after so many years I've been through lots of teamwork.

题目问的是“patient”，学生误用“passionate”，应改为“patient”。

× So let's practice a lot of my personality and I think I become a better person for people.

✓ So I've practiced a lot and I think I have become a better person for others.

“practice a lot of my personality”表达不自然，应改为“I've practiced a lot”。“become”时态应为现在完成时“have become”。“for people”应改为“for others”。