Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cavabınızda "uh" və "umm" kimi sözləri azaltmaq lazımdır. Daha təbii və axıcı ifadələr istifadə edin. Məsələn, fikrinizi birbaşa və qısa cümlələrlə ifadə edin.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I believe patience is a virtue. I always try to remain calm, even in stressful situations.

提案: Cümlələrinizdə təkrarlanan "umm" və "uh" sözlərini azaltmaq və fikri daha aydın ifadə etmək lazımdır. Həmçinin, əlaqələndirici sözlərdən istifadə edərək fikri daha məntiqli edin.

例: I feel impatient when someone deliberately tries to annoy me because I dislike such situations. However, I always try to remain patient despite that.

提案: Cümləniz tamamlanmamışdır və təkrarlamalar var. Cavabınızı tam və aydın şəkildə ifadə edin, əlaqələndirici sözlərdən istifadə edin və fikri tamamlayın.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I set a specific time for each part of the task. This helps me stay responsible and enjoy completing the work efficiently.

提案: Cavabınızda çoxlu "uh" və "umm" sözləri var, onları azaltmaq lazımdır. Cümlələri daha qısa və aydın qurun, fikri daha səlis ifadə edin.

例: Yes, my job as a process automation engineer requires a lot of patience because it involves dangerous tasks. I must follow all safety rules carefully and act patiently to avoid accidents.

提案: Cümlələriniz qarışıq və təkrarlamalarla doludur. Daha sadə və aydın ifadələrdən istifadə edin, fikri tam və məntiqli şəkildə ifadə edin.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Back then, I would cry if I didn't get what I wanted, but now I understand situations better and can control my emotions.

× If someone tries to annoy me in that situation, I can be umm, a little impatient because I hate that umm situation and uh along with I always try to stay patient.

✓ If someone tries to annoy me in that situation, I can be umm, a little impatient because I hate that umm situation but I always try to stay patient.

The phrase 'and uh along with I always try to stay patient' is incorrect because 'along with' is not properly used here and the pronoun 'I' is awkwardly placed. Replacing 'and uh along with' with 'but' creates a correct conjunction and clearer meaning.

× I try to do all of them responsibility with responsibility and I enjoy doing a task because I.

✓ I try to do all of them responsibly and I enjoy doing a task because I.

The word 'responsibility' is a noun, but here an adverb 'responsibly' is needed to describe how the tasks are done. Using the correct adverb form improves grammatical accuracy.

× I try to do all of them responsibility with responsibility and I enjoy doing a task because I.

✓ I try to do all of them responsibly and I enjoy doing tasks because I like to complete them.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. Adding a proper ending and correcting the structure makes the sentence complete and clear.

× I think, uh, yes, because uh, my, uh, my work is process automation engineering and it's uh, uh, it's uh, dangerous work.

✓ I think, uh, yes, because uh, my, uh, my work is in process automation engineering and it's uh, uh, dangerous work.

The phrase 'my work is process automation engineering' lacks the preposition 'in' which is necessary to indicate the field of work.

× Uh, I uh, should know every, umm, rules for uh, my safety and I try to act with more patience.

✓ Uh, I uh, should know every, umm, rule for uh, my safety and I try to act with more patience.

The word 'every' should be followed by a singular noun 'rule' not plural 'rules'. Using 'every' with plural nouns is incorrect.

× I think yes, because, uh, when I was a child, umm, I'm, I'm gonna, uh, to, I'm gonna cry, uh, if, uh, I want to some to have something, umm, I didn't have any patient and any understanding of the situation, but now I'm more patient than that.

✓ I think yes, because, uh, when I was a child, umm, I was gonna cry if I wanted to have something, umm, I didn't have any patience or understanding of the situation, but now I'm more patient than that.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun usage and awkward phrasing such as 'I'm gonna to' and 'I want to some to have something'. Correcting these to 'I was gonna cry if I wanted to have something' improves clarity and grammar. Also, 'patient' should be 'patience' as a noun here.