Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and a bit redundant. Try to give a direct response first, then add clear supporting details using simple linking words. Avoid confusing phrases like 'irregular to the personal life of public life I share a lot of'.

例: Yes, I am a patient person. For example, I stay calm when I face challenges in my personal and public life, which helps me achieve my goals steadily.

提案: Your answer is relevant but repetitive. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, try to use varied vocabulary.

例: I feel most impatient when I face defeat. For instance, failing at a task makes me restless because I always strive to succeed.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more concise and connected. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating words like 'many'.

例: I feel bored and irritated when I have to do something for a long time because I prefer to explore different places. For example, I enjoy visiting shops and meeting new people to keep myself engaged.

提案: Good answer with relevant details. To improve, try to use linking words and avoid repeating phrases like 'so much patient'. Also, clarify your job role smoothly.

例: Yes, my job as a pilot requires a great deal of patience because I deal with many passengers daily. Therefore, staying patient helps me ensure a smooth and safe flight for everyone.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to express your idea clearly with correct grammar and linking words.

例: I was less patient as a child because I did not understand its importance. However, as I grew up and learned from experiences, I became more patient.

× I show a lot of calmness towards my goals, towards any situation that happens to me irregular to the personal life of public life I share a lot of.

✓ I show a lot of calmness towards my goals and towards any situation that happens to me, whether in my personal life or public life, which I share a lot of.

The phrase 'irregular to the personal life of public life' is incorrect and unclear. The correct preposition and conjunction usage should be 'whether in my personal life or public life' to express the contrast properly.

× I myself feel so much impatient.

✓ I myself feel very impatient.

The phrase 'so much impatient' is incorrect because 'impatient' is an adjective and should be modified by 'very' instead of 'so much', which is used with nouns or verbs.

× I don't want to stay in a place for an hours and hours.

✓ I don't want to stay in a place for hours and hours.

The article 'an' is incorrectly used before the plural noun 'hours'. 'Hours' is plural and does not require an article here.

× I've been a pilot.

✓ I am a pilot.

The present perfect tense 'I've been a pilot' suggests a past action with relevance to the present, but the context implies current occupation, so simple present 'I am a pilot' is appropriate.

× I have to be so much patient so that I can have a smoother flight for me and for my passengers.

✓ I have to be very patient so that I can have a smoother flight for myself and my passengers.

The phrase 'so much patient' is incorrect; 'very patient' is the correct form. Also, 'for me' should be 'for myself' to correctly use the reflexive pronoun.

× When I was a child, I really don't know the synonym of patience.

✓ When I was a child, I really didn't know the meaning of patience.

The tense should be past ('didn't know') to match 'When I was a child'. Also, 'synonym of patience' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'meaning of patience'.

× It's what I was in a child and by growing up I learned a lot of things.

✓ That's what I was like as a child, and by growing up, I learned a lot of things.

The phrase 'in a child' is incorrect; 'as a child' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, 'It's what I was' is better expressed as 'That's what I was like'.