Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免语法错误，如“haven't”应改为“don't”。此外，回答可以更简洁自然，避免重复表达。

例: I consider myself patient when I'm engaged in activities I enjoy, like crafting or writing. However, I tend to be less patient with tasks that don't interest me.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，应注意句子结构完整，避免语法错误。

例: I feel impatient when I have to complete assessments or essays because they require a lot of writing and effort.

提案: 回答应更连贯，使用连接词使表达更流畅，同时避免使用不自然的词汇如“pleasured”。

例: It depends; if I'm interested in the task, I feel happy and sometimes want to share interesting things with my friends. Otherwise, I might feel bored.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，应注意时态一致和句子完整，同时使用恰当词汇。

例: Definitely. As a part-time tennis coach, I need to be very patient when teaching children. I also try to build friendly relationships with them because they are very interesting.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整，应注意时态和句子结构，避免重复和不完整的句子。

例: I think I was more patient as a child because I had less pressure and more time to enjoy my hobbies and personality.

× If I really like to do something, such as crafting or writing, I think I have a lot of patience, but if I'm not interested in something, I haven't.

✓ If I really like to do something, such as crafting or writing, I think I have a lot of patience, but if I'm not interested in something, I don't.

这里的“haven't”用法错误，应该用“don't”来表示否定的现在时态，因为前半句是现在时态，后半句也应保持一致。

× I often failed impatient because I need to do a lot of and write a lot of.

✓ I often feel impatient because I need to do a lot and write a lot.

“failed impatient”用法错误，应该用“feel impatient”表示感到不耐烦，且时态应为现在时，因为描述的是经常发生的情况。

× I need to do a lot of and write a lot of.

✓ I need to do a lot and write a lot.

“a lot of”后面应接可数或不可数名词，这里缺少名词，应该去掉“of”直接用“a lot”。

× Personally, if I'm involved in these things, I feel happy or pleasured.

✓ Personally, if I'm involved in these things, I feel happy or pleased.

“pleasured”是过去分词，表示被取悦，形容词应使用“pleased”表示感到高兴。

× Sometimes I wish to share with my friends some interesting things in addition.

✓ Sometimes I wish to share some interesting things with my friends in addition.

“share with my friends some interesting things”语序不正确，正确表达应是“share some interesting things with my friends”。

× I have a part time job tennis coach.

✓ I have a part-time job as a tennis coach.

缺少介词“as”连接职位，且“part time”应连写为“part-time”作为形容词。

× I needed to teach some children how to play tennis.

✓ I need to teach some children how to play tennis.

根据上下文，描述的是现在的工作，时态应为现在时“need”，而非过去时“needed”。

× I need a lot of pressure, patient and I often wish to become a friend with those children.

✓ I need a lot of patience, be patient and I often wish to become friends with those children.

“pressure”应为“patience”表示耐心；“patient”应用作形容词，前面需加动词“be”；“become a friend”应改为“become friends”表示与多个人建立友谊。

× They are very interesting and.

✓ They are very interesting.

句子末尾多余“and”，导致句子不完整，应去掉。

× I think I have more patient when I was a child because when I was a child that I had no pressures and I often have more time to do some things according my hobbies or my personalities.

✓ I think I was more patient when I was a child because I had no pressure and I often had more time to do some things according to my hobbies or my personality.

“more patient”是形容词比较级，正确；“when I was a child that I had no pressures”语序错误，应去掉“that”；“pressures”应为不可数名词“pressure”；“have more time”时态应与过去时一致改为“had”；“according my hobbies or my personalities”应为“according to my hobbies or my personality”。

× In addition, I also.

✓ In addition, I also...

句子不完整，缺少谓语和宾语，建议补充完整内容。