Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct vocabulary and grammar to express your ideas clearly. For example, use 'patient' instead of 'painted' and 'demanding' instead of 'dimming'. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because my demanding job requires a lot of patience, and I have been developing this quality since I was young.

提案: Improve sentence structure and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, be more specific about the situation causing impatience.

例: One main reason that makes me feel impatient is noise, especially during my free time. For instance, last week, some kids were playing loudly next to my house, which disturbed my relaxation and made me feel impatient.

提案: Use correct vocabulary and grammar, and organize your answer clearly. Explain your methods to stay relaxed with linking words.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I prepare a comfortable place to help me relax. Additionally, I play music because it reduces stress and helps me stay focused.

提案: Focus on correct verb forms and vocabulary. Also, clarify your answer by directly addressing the question and providing reasons.

例: I am very interested in becoming a doctor, which requires a lot of patience because you have to work with patients and visitors. I have been developing my patience since I was young, although it is quite challenging.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide a clear comparison between past and present.

例: No, I was less patient as a child because no one taught me how to be patient. However, now there are many sources, like parents and school, that help me learn patience, which is very useful.

× Actually yes I wish I a painted person because one of my dimming jobs require to be a patient and I always develop that since I was young.

✓ Actually yes I wish I was a patient person because one of my demanding jobs requires me to be patient and I have always developed that since I was young.

The phrase 'I a painted person' is incorrect; it should be 'I was a patient person' using the past tense of 'to be' to express a wish about a state. 'Dimming jobs' is likely a typo for 'demanding jobs'. 'Require to be' should be 'requires me to be' to correctly use the verb 'require' with a subject and object. 'Develop' should be in present perfect 'have developed' to indicate an action continuing from the past to present.

× Actually yes I wish I a painted person because one of my dimming jobs require to be a patient and I always develop that since I was young.

✓ Actually yes I wish I was a patient person because one of my demanding jobs requires me to be patient and I have always developed that since I was young.

The verb 'require' must agree with the singular subject 'one of my demanding jobs', so it should be 'requires'.

× Actually yes I wish I a painted person because one of my dimming jobs require to be a patient and I always develop that since I was young.

✓ Actually yes I wish I was a patient person because one of my demanding jobs requires me to be patient and I have always developed that since I was young.

The word 'painted' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'patient' to describe a person who can endure difficulties calmly.

× In fact, one of the main reason which make me feel impatient is the noise, especially in my free time.

✓ In fact, one of the main reasons which makes me feel impatient is the noise, especially in my free time.

The subject 'one of the main reasons' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' not 'make'. Also, 'reason' should be plural 'reasons' because of 'one of the' construction.

× For example, last week when I had the free time for my jobs there, some kids play next to my house and I felt impatient.

✓ For example, last week when I had free time from my job there, some kids were playing next to my house and I felt impatient.

The verb 'play' should be in past continuous 'were playing' to describe an action happening at that time. 'Jobs' should be singular 'job' if referring to one job. 'Had the free time for my jobs' is awkward; 'had free time from my job' is better.

× Actually I prepare a comfortable blazes because it help me relaxing.

✓ Actually I prepare a comfortable place because it helps me relax.

'Blazes' is incorrect; likely meant 'place'. 'Help me relaxing' should be 'helps me relax' because 'help' is followed by the base verb. Also, 'prepare' is present tense and fits here.

× Actually I prepare a comfortable blazes because it help me relaxing.

✓ Actually I prepare a comfortable place because it helps me relax.

The verb 'help' must agree with singular subject 'it', so it should be 'helps'.

× However not only a comfortable blaze it helped me to be relaxing it also playing music which it is reduce stress for a long time.

✓ However, not only does a comfortable place help me relax, but also playing music reduces stress for a long time.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'It helped me to be relaxing' should be 'help me relax'. 'Playing music which it is reduce stress' should be 'playing music reduces stress'. The modal 'does' is needed for emphasis in negative form 'not only does...'. Also, 'blaze' should be 'place'.

× Actually Ionem very interested in becoming a doctor.

✓ Actually I am very interested in becoming a doctor.

'Ionem' is a typo for 'I am'. The modal verb 'am' is necessary to express the present state of being interested.

× This job require a lot of patience because you have to worked with the visitor and customer.

✓ This job requires a lot of patience because you have to work with visitors and customers.

The verb 'require' must agree with singular subject 'job', so it should be 'requires'. 'Worked' should be base form 'work' after 'have to'. 'Visitor' and 'customer' should be plural to generalize.

× However, I spend a lot of time to develop my patient since I was young, it's really difficult.

✓ However, I have spent a lot of time developing my patience since I was young; it's really difficult.

'Spend' should be present perfect 'have spent' to indicate an action continuing from past to present. 'To develop' should be gerund 'developing'. 'Patient' is incorrect; the noun is 'patience'.

× No, I think because when I was young there no one teach me how to be a patient, but now I think I think there are many of sources can provide for you how to be a patient such as your parents at the school.

✓ No, I think because when I was young there was no one to teach me how to be patient, but now I think there are many sources that can teach you how to be patient, such as your parents and school.

'There no one teach me' should be 'there was no one to teach me' to use correct past tense and infinitive. 'Many of sources' should be 'many sources'. 'Can provide for you how to be a patient' is awkward; better 'can teach you how to be patient'. 'At the school' should be 'and school'.

× No, I think because when I was young there no one teach me how to be a patient, but now I think I think there are many of sources can provide for you how to be a patient such as your parents at the school. However, I really useful to be patient.

✓ No, I think because when I was young there was no one to teach me how to be patient, but now I think there are many sources that can teach you how to be patient, such as your parents and school. However, it is really useful to be patient.

'I really useful to be patient' is incorrect; it should be 'it is really useful to be patient' to include the verb 'is' and correct pronoun.