Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to improve grammatical accuracy and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of repeating 'I usually not very patient' and 'because it feels like a waste of time', you can say, 'I am usually impatient when waiting for someone late to a meeting as it feels like wasting time.' Also, clarify 'clone queue' to 'long queue' for naturalness.

例: I am usually impatient when waiting for someone who is late to a meeting because it feels like wasting time. However, in other situations, such as standing in a long queue, I try to stay calm and patient.

提案: Your answer repeats the previous response and lacks variety. Try to add more specific reasons or feelings to enrich your answer. Also, avoid repeating the same sentence from before.

例: I feel impatient when people are late for meetings because it disrupts my schedule and makes me feel like my time is not valued.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I usually feel tired at first. However, I try to adjust by taking short breaks and observing others to learn how to manage my time better.

提案: Good answer with relevant details. To improve, correct minor grammatical errors and use linking words for better flow. For example, replace 'so who can sometimes be anxious at or upset' with 'who can sometimes be anxious or upset'.

例: Yes, definitely. My job requires a lot of patience because I deal with patients every day, and they often have different moods and needs. Moreover, I also interact with their family members, who can sometimes be anxious or upset. Therefore, I need to remain calm and understanding in all situations.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by combining sentences for better coherence and using linking words. Also, avoid starting sentences with 'Especially'.

例: Yes, I'm definitely more patient now than when I was a child, especially since I have my own children. I understand how important it is to treat them kindly, so I try my best to be patient not only with my kids but also with other children and patients at the hospital where I work.

× I usually not very patient when I have to wait for someone who is late for a meeting because it feels like a waste of time.

✓ I am usually not very patient when I have to wait for someone who is late for a meeting because it feels like a waste of time.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present tense 'am not'. In English, the verb 'to be' is required to link the subject and the adjective in the present tense. The correct form is 'I am usually not very patient'. This is a Present tense issue (ID 6).

× I think I should need to adjust because I'm not doing it recently so I need to. Properties or observe on what they are doing because I'm not used to it.

✓ I think I need to adjust because I haven't been doing it recently, so I need to observe what they are doing because I'm not used to it.

The original sentence has several structural problems: 'should need to' is incorrect; 'I'm not doing it recently' should be 'I haven't been doing it recently' to express recent past; 'Properties or observe on' is unclear and incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects verb tenses and structure. This is a Sentence structure error (ID 26).

× Additionally, I also interact with their family members so who can sometimes be anxious at or upset.

✓ Additionally, I also interact with their family members who can sometimes be anxious or upset.

The phrase 'so who can sometimes be anxious at or upset' is incorrect. The preposition 'at' is unnecessary and 'so' is misplaced. The correct phrase is 'who can sometimes be anxious or upset'. This is an Incorrect use of prepositions issue (ID 11).

× Additionally, I also interact with their family members so who can sometimes be anxious at or upset.

✓ Additionally, I also interact with their family members who can sometimes be anxious or upset.

The use of 'so who' is incorrect here. The relative pronoun 'who' should directly follow 'family members' without 'so'. This is an Incorrect use of pronouns issue (ID 12).

× So I need to remain calm and understanding in all situations.

✓ Therefore, I need to remain calm and understanding in all situations.

Starting a sentence with 'So' as a conjunction is informal and can be improved by using 'Therefore' to show cause and effect more clearly. This is an Incorrect conjunction use issue (ID 16).

× Especially I have my own children.

✓ Especially since I have my own children.

The sentence fragment 'Especially I have my own children' lacks a conjunction or preposition to connect it properly. Adding 'since' clarifies the reason. This is an Incorrect use of prepositions issue (ID 11).