Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question first, then provide a clear example. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

例: I am not a very patient person. For example, when I do practice exams, I tend to rush through the questions without taking enough time to think carefully.

提案: Your answer is understandable but lacks fluency and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words. Also, try to elaborate more specifically on why hard tasks make you impatient.

例: I feel impatient mostly when the task is difficult because I have to spend a lot of time figuring out the solution. Therefore, I usually prefer easier questions that I can complete quickly.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical mistakes and could be more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide a clearer explanation of your feelings.

例: I feel very stressed when I have to work on something for a long time because I need to finish it before the deadline. For example, in accounting tasks, accuracy and timeliness are very important, which adds to my stress.

提案: Your answer has good content but is difficult to understand due to grammar and word choice errors. Try to use clearer sentences and relevant vocabulary to explain why patience is important in your job.

例: Yes, my job in accounting requires patience because I need to be careful with data. Even a small mistake during reconciliation can cause big problems later.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Focus on directly answering the question with clear reasons and avoid filler words. Make sure your sentences are complete and coherent.

例: I am more patient now than when I was a child because my job requires me to follow company policies and meet key performance indicators, which teaches me to be more disciplined and patient.

× I think I'm not a patient person because when I doing something for example, just like doing a practice exam, I will keep talking like reading the question and I will talking keep talking.

✓ I think I'm not a patient person because when I am doing something, for example, just like doing a practice exam, I will keep talking, like reading the question, and I will keep talking.

The verb 'doing' needs an auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense correctly. Also, 'I will talking keep talking' is incorrect; it should be 'I will keep talking' to maintain proper verb form and word order.

× Uh, mostly is, uh, relative about the, the task, whether it's hard.

✓ Uh, mostly it is related to the task, whether it's hard.

The phrase 'relative about' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'related to'. This is a prepositional error but also involves verb form and word choice for clarity.

× If the task is very hard, I will feel very impatient because I need to think about how to figure out.

✓ If the task is very hard, I will feel very impatient because I need to think about how to figure it out.

The phrase 'how to figure out' is incomplete; it requires an object, so 'figure it out' is correct.

× For something is need to do long time, I will feel very stressful because I have to finish it before the deadline.

✓ For something that needs to be done for a long time, I will feel very stressed because I have to finish it before the deadline.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and word order. 'Is need to do' should be 'needs to be done' to express necessity in present tense. Also, 'feel very stressful' is incorrect; 'feel stressed' is the correct expression.

× So that's made me very stressful.

✓ So that has made me very stressed.

'Stressful' describes something that causes stress, while 'stressed' describes a person's feeling. The correct adjective here is 'stressed'.

× Yes, accounting shops require be patient because patient can bring the careful and appreciate the every task is relative about the data, so every single uh, mistakes may be could cause a big problem after doing the reconciliation.

✓ Yes, accounting shops require being patient because patience can bring carefulness and appreciation; every task is related to the data, so every single mistake could cause a big problem after doing the reconciliation.

'Require be patient' is incorrect; it should be 'require being patient' or 'require patience'. 'Patient' is an adjective, but here a noun or gerund is needed. Also, 'patient can bring the careful' is incorrect; 'patience can bring carefulness' is correct. 'Relative about' should be 'related to'. 'Mistakes may be could cause' is redundant; 'could cause' suffices.

× I think I'm more patient now because now I restrict by the company.

✓ I think I'm more patient now because now I am restricted by the company.

The verb 'restrict' needs to be in the passive form 'am restricted' to indicate that the subject is being limited by the company.

× There are lots of the policy or KPI need to, uh, focus and I have to follow the, uh, the cons, the, the rule to do everything.

✓ There are lots of policies or KPIs I need to focus on, and I have to follow the rules to do everything.

'Lots of the policy' is incorrect; it should be 'lots of policies' without 'the'. Also, 'the cons' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'rules' is more appropriate. Articles are misused and plural forms are needed.

× Not like the trial. I can do everything by.

✓ Not like in the trial, I could do everything by myself.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. 'By' needs an object, such as 'myself'. Also, 'trial' likely means 'trial period' or 'before', so adding 'in the trial' clarifies meaning.