Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use correct grammar and avoid repeating the word 'patient'. Also, make your answer more natural by rephrasing and adding a linking phrase.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because when things don't go as planned, I stay calm and try to start over without getting frustrated.

提案: Your answer is understandable but includes filler words and informal expressions. Try to avoid fillers like 'umm' and use more precise vocabulary. Also, structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting detail.

例: I feel impatient when people are rude to me or accuse me of being selfish, as it makes me upset and less tolerant.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical mistakes. Avoid repeating phrases unnecessarily and use correct sentence structures. Also, try to connect your ideas logically with linking words.

例: I feel positive when I have to do something for a long time because it helps me develop patience. Moreover, I enjoy challenges as they motivate me to improve myself.

提案: Your answer is unclear and informal. Avoid using slang like 'gonna' and be more direct in your response. Also, clarify your ideas and avoid repeating phrases.

例: I am still a student, so I don't have a job yet. However, I think a marketing manager needs to be patient because the job involves dealing with many people and challenges.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid sentence fragments. Use linking words to connect your points.

例: Absolutely, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have matured and learned how to control my emotions and respond appropriately.

× Yes, I consider myself a patient person because when things doesn't go well like I want, I can be calm and patient to start a new thing.

✓ Yes, I consider myself a patient person because when things don't go well like I want, I can be calm and patient to start a new thing.

The subject 'things' is plural, so the verb should be 'don't' instead of 'doesn't' to agree in number.

× Maybe when people start to umm, be so rude with me and call me like selfish, I can be impatient.

✓ Maybe when people start to umm, be so rude to me and call me selfish, I can be impatient.

The correct preposition to use with 'rude' is 'to' not 'with'. Also, 'call me like selfish' is incorrect; it should be 'call me selfish' without 'like'.

× I feel good, like I must to do something for a long time to see if I can be more patient or no.

✓ I feel good, like I must do something for a long time to see if I can be more patient or not.

The modal verb 'must' is followed directly by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Also, 'or no' should be 'or not' for correct negation.

× And also I love challenge, I love challenge, I love challenge and I also want to be more.

✓ And also I love challenges, I love challenges, I love challenges and I also want to be more patient.

'Challenge' should be plural 'challenges' to match the context. Also, 'want to be more' is incomplete; it should specify 'more patient' to clarify the meaning.

× I don't know because I'm still a student, but I'm gonna say that marketing manager, I don't think so that I have to be more patient because I would do something that I like.

✓ I don't know because I'm still a student, but I'm gonna say that as a marketing manager, I don't think I have to be more patient because I would do something that I like.

The phrase 'that marketing manager' is incorrect; it should be 'as a marketing manager' to indicate the role. Also, 'I don't think so that I have to be more patient' is awkward; 'I don't think I have to be more patient' is correct.

× Absolutely, because now I am 18 years old, I'm so mature, so I am more patient because I don't. I know things how to feel and how to respond when I am more mature.

✓ Absolutely, because now I am 18 years old, I'm so mature, so I am more patient because I know how to feel and how to respond when I am more mature.

The phrase 'I don't. I know things how to feel' is incorrect and confusing. It should be 'I know how to feel' to express understanding of emotions properly.