Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: The answer does not address the question about patience and instead talks about health issues, which is off-topic. To improve, directly answer the question about being patient and provide relevant supporting details.

例: No, I am not a very patient person. I often get frustrated when things don't happen quickly, especially if I have to wait for a long time.

提案: The answer is relevant but incomplete and contains hesitations and unclear ending. To improve, complete the thought clearly, reduce filler words, and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I feel impatient when things don't go according to my plan, especially if I have to wait for a long time. For example, if an appointment is delayed by an hour, I find it very frustrating because it feels out of my control.

提案: The answer expresses the feeling but has grammatical errors and many hesitations. To improve, use correct tense, avoid repetition, and provide a clear, coherent response with linking words.

例: I feel frustrated when I have to do something for a long time, especially if the task is repetitive. I prefer tasks that can be completed quickly because repeating the same thing tires me.

提案: The answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. To improve, use correct grammar, avoid repetition, and use linking words to make the answer more coherent.

例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because tasks often take a long time to complete. However, I try to be patient because it helps me achieve my goals and succeed in my projects.

提案: The answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrasing. To improve, use clearer sentence structures, correct grammar, and provide specific examples or reasons.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. As a child, I wanted everything immediately, but as an adult, I have learned to be more responsible and patient because I understand the importance of waiting and planning.

× Well, I got frustrated, uh, like, uh, I only like that task which done so quickly, uh, and then the same things I have to repeat again and again, I get frustrated very much.

✓ Well, I get frustrated, uh, like, uh, I only like tasks which are done quickly, uh, and then when I have to repeat the same things again and again, I get very frustrated.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'got' (past tense) when the context requires present tense 'get' to express a general feeling. Also, 'that task which done so quickly' lacks the auxiliary verb 'are' for the passive voice and should be plural 'tasks' to match the context. The phrase 'I get frustrated very much' is better expressed as 'I get very frustrated' for natural adverb placement.

× Yes, every job requires a patient because the the tasks are long nowadays and we have to sit for hours to complete it.

✓ Yes, every job requires patience because the tasks are long nowadays and we have to sit for hours to complete them.

The word 'patient' is a noun meaning a person receiving medical care, but the intended meaning is the quality 'patience'. Also, 'the the' is a typographical error. 'Tasks' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it'.

× But when we become adults and we have become responsible person so these situations change the change our behaviour automatically and in my I have also changed this behavior.

✓ But when we become adults and responsible persons, these situations automatically change our behavior, and I have also changed this behavior.

The phrase 'we have become responsible person' is incorrect because 'person' should be plural 'persons' to agree with 'we'. The phrase 'the change our behaviour' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'change our behavior'. The phrase 'in my I have also changed' is unclear and likely a mistake; it is omitted for clarity.