Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity and correct minor errors to make your answer more natural and effective. Avoid unclear words like 'cami' and ensure sentence structure is smooth. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can remain calm in stressful situations and stay in control even when I feel irritated. Moreover, I am quite persistent and can maintain focus on a task for a long time.

提案: Avoid informal expressions like 'huff and puff' and unclear phrases such as 'scribblers routine work'. Use more precise vocabulary and linking words to clarify your points.

例: I often feel impatient when I have to wait for automated responses or when someone is late. Additionally, repetitive routine tasks or not achieving quick results can also make me feel frustrated.

提案: Start directly with your opinion and avoid awkward phrasing like 'One had to do something for a long time.' Use linking words to connect your feelings and actions more smoothly.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I sometimes get frustrated, especially if people around me are distracting or uncooperative. However, I try to stay focused so that I can complete the task successfully.

提案: Correct grammatical errors and unclear phrases such as 'something situations' and 'perform my duties respectively.' Use precise vocabulary and linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I often have to handle difficult situations and help others understand complex information. Being patient enables me to perform my duties effectively.

提案: Avoid hesitation sounds like 'uh' and improve sentence fluency. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct 'less patience' to 'less patient.'

例: No, I think I was less patient as a child because I lacked experience in handling unexpected situations and emotions. Moreover, I didn't practice yoga back then, so I wasn't familiar with the calming techniques I use now.

× Well, I guess I can say yes as I am able to wait cami in stressful situation and can stay in control even when I'm irritated.

✓ Well, I guess I can say yes as I am able to wait calmly in stressful situations and can stay in control even when I'm irritated.

The word 'cami' is a typo and should be 'calmly', which is an adverb modifying the verb 'wait'. Also, 'situation' should be plural 'situations' to match the general context. Using the correct adverb and plural noun improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Well, I guess I can say yes as I am able to wait cami in stressful situation and can stay in control even when I'm irritated.

✓ Well, I guess I can say yes as I am able to wait calmly in stressful situations and can stay in control even when I'm irritated.

The noun 'situation' should be plural 'situations' because the sentence refers to stressful situations in general, not a single one. Using the plural form is appropriate for general statements.

× What's more, I am rather persistent and can stay focused on something for the long run.

✓ What's more, I am rather persistent and can stay focused on something for the long run.

No correction needed here for verb + -ing form; the phrase 'stay focused' is correct. However, 'for the long run' is idiomatic and acceptable.

× While I can become impatient about automated responses and waiting for someone who is late, I can also huff and puff because of doing some scribblers routine work for a long time or failing to get quick results.

✓ While I can become impatient about automated responses and waiting for someone who is late, I can also huff and puff because of doing some scribbler's routine work for a long time or failing to get quick results.

The word 'scribblers' should be possessive 'scribbler's' to indicate that the routine work belongs to the scribbler. This is a possessive pronoun usage error.

× While I can become impatient about automated responses and waiting for someone who is late, I can also huff and puff because of doing some scribblers routine work for a long time or failing to get quick results.

✓ While I can become impatient about automated responses and waiting for someone who is late, I can also huff and puff because of doing some scribbler's routine work for a long time or failing to get quick results.

The phrase 'because of doing' is awkward; it would be better to say 'because I have to do' or 'because of doing'. However, since the instruction is to only correct mistakes listed, this is acceptable. The main correction is the possessive form.

× One had to do something for a long time.

✓ When one has to do something for a long time.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks context. Adding 'When' and changing 'had' to 'has' makes it a proper conditional clause that fits the following sentence.

× Yes, my shop requires a lot of patience because I often have to deal with something situations and help others understand complex information.

✓ Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I often have to deal with some situations and help others understand complex information.

The phrase 'something situations' is incorrect. It should be 'some situations' to correctly quantify the noun. Also, 'shop' is likely a mistranslation or misuse; 'job' fits better in this context.

× Being patient allows me to perform my duties respectively.

✓ Being patient allows me to perform my duties respectfully.

The word 'respectively' is incorrectly used here. The correct adverb is 'respectfully', which means with respect. 'Respectively' is used to indicate correspondence in order, which does not fit the context.

× No, well, I guess I used to be less patience because I didn't have enough experience in coping with unexpected situations and emotions.

✓ No, well, I guess I used to be less patient because I didn't have enough experience in coping with unexpected situations and emotions.

The adjective 'patience' is incorrectly used; it should be the adjective form 'patient' to describe a person. 'Patience' is a noun.